RW Wk1 - Virbius vs Unfukwitable

[Bag Mandela]

Ransom Writers Week 1 - Regular 6 Line Battle

6 lines each (doesn’t have to be set up-punch x3, you have creative freedom)

Bars due Tuesday 15th Oct
Public voting closes Wednesday 16th Oct

-Posting explanations / references below your bars is strongly recommended.
-State your accent in this first round then we’re good for the rest of the tourney.


2 impartial judges + public vote will decide the winner
MV’s vote = 1 vote
Bag's vote = 1 vote
Overall public vote = 1 vote
(Rebuttals, late drops & no shows are an instant loss)

@Virbius @Unfukwitable

[Virbius]

Check

[Unfukwitable]

Check

[Virbius]

I wanted a break from all the beef and politics and tryna be provocative so I came in thinking I might try to keep it positive coz you’re nice with the rhymes and your themes evocative, and
…Nah fuck that! since it’s starting with Un I must mean the opposite. Let’s go!
I’ll shiv this bitch in the ribs til his lungs tear and it’s unfair I’ll take Unf air and his firstborn too, I ain’t done there,
I’ll cook his flesh like a French chef taking some care, come share, we were bros so I’m gonna serve Unf rare (un frere).
Or it’s something similar just as sinister, I’ll punch this cunt til the lumps disfigure ya,
Gushing blood and viscera, then when his folks can’t identify his corpse, fuck, that’s Unf familia.


Explanations:
Starting with Un- first opp of the tournament. If you’ve got un at the start of a word then it means the opposite.
Said it’s unfair I’ll take Unf air and his firstborn too, so that’s Unf heir.
Serve Unf rare- unique beating, or serve his flesh rare, or ‘un frere’ meaning ‘a brother’ in French.
Unf familia- his folks, or unfamiliar (because he’s body’s mutilated beyond recognition).

Accent: Southwest England

[Unfukwitable]

This lying puss ain’t a beast, this bitch boutta be dying shook,
They thought Virb’ll alarm us til he sees a Half moon now he’s dying a crying wolf,
Ima break ya face and choke u til u fade away, beat u til u’re pale and make a tape,
The Video titled: “Fuk whippin this bitch til he’s 50 shades of grey”!,
I got meatgrinders to press u thru, Ima shoot you Then server you,
Once we see V, 8 Splash in his body ! Then we taking the corpse & blending the vegetable!





(EXPO)
Verbal Alarm(Crying Wolf = Half Moons)
If you seen 50 shades of grey u should get it
V8 splash is a juice and ima blend his body while he’s still a vegetable

[Jack Hallows]

Vote - Virbius

this was a hard battle for me to judge but one i definitely wanted to, regardless. took me about a half hour going over both verses carefully & i’m sure my decision is solid.

Virbius has a frustrating rhyme style. his six lines could easily stretch into 10 with how much content is crammed in one bar, but if read a certain way, it actually flows aight, just very syllabic. had to keep re-reading to get used to it as to not be biased against it. i still don’t like it, but it works. what i did like about the verse was that once i got the cadence of it down, it actually flowed pretty well. it was chaotic, very compressed & had a lot of internal connectivity that branched into the wider scheme. the concepts were well developed and some were easy to miss if not paying attention, like the brother/un frere line. i liked the wordplay of using unf repeatedly in various ways. particularly liked the unf air line & all the internal multis. solid verse, a bit cramped but very creative & had a couple tough lines to outdo. closer was dope.

Unfukwitable came solid as always. clean bars. easy to read. direct & to the point. i liked the 50 shades line. never saw the flick but i know it’s some bdsm white people shit. Virb’ll wordplay was cool, Unfwit does that well. the decider for me overall was the closer. i liked Unfwit’s concept but it didn’t land as hard as Virbius’ closer. up until that point i think it was pretty evenly matched.

good, consistent drops from both. i won’t let my preference in style overshadow the quality of content so that’s why my vote stands as is. could go either way though, because both came out swinging. good shit y’all. made me work for the vote, which i like.

Howl.