Week 9: Wite-Wnter vs oatmeal[Both get noshow win]

[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...642/index.html

Rules and Regulations. Drop by Saturday, Vote by Monday.

[White-Winter]

again???

check

[PabloCuesta]

I was about to say the same thing... Last time i got bullshited though, so we'll see what happens this time around lmfao

p.s. CHECK!

[PabloCuesta]

Dude im sorry but something really important came up, and im not going to be able to show, im going to sign out as well.

[White-Winter]

droppin a no-show...i have writers block

A declaration to open space


Memories create the darkest space, a place
Where enjoyment is ousted like a meaningless face
Our addiction to love overrides the reality to accept
When one cannot reach an open arm as the swept-
Force of hate discourages the prize of peace, a succession
Of symbols float across the page with precision, the progression
Begins to uplift your body like a blossomed flower, the power
To create comes from the wilderness lost within an abandoned tower
...or maybe the substances from the poppy fields
Ecstasy consumes the heart of rhino, our body yields
To the demands of an addiction-money to thumping beats
Draws us to peace, but the reality we live is the life we cheat

[Cody Nash]

Oatmeal's verse --


Musical Chemistry

it begins with a single atom, a note at it's purest element
until they bunch in chemical chords that rest at a compound settlement
they advance into larger clusters, painting an obvious picture
of a chord progression equivalent to a homogenous mixture
because few only get to see nature's beauty flow endlessly
tune to it mentally and you'll hear the music of chemistry
the impossible realities that are synched in prediction
woven in numbers, the truth, that you think should be fiction
linked in it's fission, proselytized for the broadest ministry
multiple instruments all working towards melodic symmetry
unbound by its own theories, expanding in unobstructed intervals
embodying lawlessness at it's seductive pinnacle
rules can be blown and stretched, they grow as they flow and flex
and it probably deposits it's greatest worth in it's brokenness
its both unique and universal, rooted in sure balance
the mechanism of machine birthing an organic
physical direction is essential in abetting applied attraction
and it's at it's grandest grade when you can measure it by reaction
chemistry is music, complete within it's lonely engagements
and forever striving towards the most harmonious cadence

[Galactus The Devourer]

WW
"a succession
Of symbols float across the page with precision, the progression
Begins to uplift your body like a blossomed flower"

I enjoyed this section of your verse, I understand this is a no show verse so I wont bust your ass about things.. Some of the concepts were nice, just needs polish.

Oatmeal, enjoyed the concept of your verse, pretty original..

because few only get to see nature's beauty flow endlessly
tune to it mentally and you'll hear the music of chemistry

really liked this couplet

embodying lawlessness at it's seductive pinnacle
rules can be blown and stretched, they grow as they flow and flex
and it probably deposits it's greatest worth in it's brokenness
its both unique and universal, rooted in sure balance

this section was nice with the rhymes, I also liked how the verse although filled with very mechanical words took on a more natural feel, for me imo....

chemistry is music, complete within it's lonely engagements
and forever striving towards the most harmonious cadence

and the ending was a nice bar..

Vote Oatmeal,


nice concept, more polished, intricate complete piece

pz

[FreshADiddle]

whoaaaa...I don't know if this can go down. White Winter dropped a no-show verse...that's not a real verse...and he PM'd me and said he'd take the no-show win because he has writers block, I just hadn't closed his thread yet...was gonna do that this morning...Gal, your voting link is still good...but I'm going to have to close this thread and give both Oatmeal and White Winter no-show wins...Cry wasn't aware that White's verse was a no-show verse.

EDIT: Oatmeal and White Winter BOTH receive no-show wins.