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Rules and Regulations
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Legendary Song - Winter Snow
lol, no show?
Wu-Tang Forever
Nothing Was The Same
afraid not.
check.
good luck.
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afraid not.
check.
good luck.
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As insecurities flourish with worry and breed nervousness.
This observant girl smirks perfectly, hurried she curves her lips.
Weak-kneed her being twirls a bit as a breeze encircles it.
The reoccurring current lifts briefly then debris surfaces.
A person's purpose on Earth is to be heard with sense.
Unless your words have worth in them - seek pertinence.
Either learn from each sermon or the grief's permanent.
Submerged in dirt it even reaches these worms for men.
Sin's a certain deterrent and hence, conversion's end.
In order to reverse this, what comes first is an urgent cleanse.
Emerge against commercialists working to conserve assertive pimps.
Curse the merchants that disturbed the immersion of inertia's prince.
Purification ensures we're here to create amends.
Delayed elation as we break away from the aging trends.
Enabling space's stasis to shape abrasive winds.
This maze of wits is a matrix glitch in the vaguest realm.
Awaiting an awakening in a nostalgic slumber.
God throws salt on the sunburns of his exhausted songbirds.
Being a hostage to reason and agnostic fatigues him.
Life's the true root of all evil from which we each stem.
Even the dead seek reckoning when in a demon's presence.
But it's easy to rest in peace while having dreams of heaven.
As the beautiful bride and a thoughtful groom bewedded.
He presented a gift: her world brought into perspective.
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Something Normal
The Lives We Lead
It's more than a tale, there's pages full of legs and arms
Vacant scars cover flesh without a way to blanket hearts
Take all the parts needed to build super-computers
No matter what comes to mind, they still VIEW us as losers
So who, as reviewers, should take in slanderous words?
Asking the worst type of question to get action from verbs
Collapse on the nerves, take a stand to extract policies
All we see is foreclosure, everything we can't wanna-be
Follow me...or don't; choices are simple to guide minds
Pick your life up by the horns...or you can sit on the sidelines
I'd find it easier to control, but I've never defined "life"
And I've never lived one either, so I guess I'm denied twice
Yes, I'm the wife type, but I'm too young within bunches
So I've got time to grow before I hold a son in my stomach
(EAT THAT MTV!)
Stories have bombed, this is life within the loneliest psalms
But these songs can leave a hole inside the core of your palm
The portion is gone, plates are stuck supporting the wrongs
Abortion belongs to weak parents who can't afford to be strong
According to God, the truth is relative with morals to back it
Sporting the tactics to survive without annoyance and brackets
Deploying a package, return to sender with a letter attached
Blackmail, the "thank god we can use money as our leverage" act
Remember the facts, we're all running from a hand that feeds
A man that bleeds nothing, but crimson as he plants the seeds
This savage needs no introduction, liars are politicians the same
Given the rank, these world leaders takeover all divisions in vain
Position the main focus, these missions had a vision for change
Now our freedom becomes the target for a whip and some chains
Consider the pain, these morsels are those wishes we've found
Kicking around the same ponds as pollution leaves fishes to drown
Listen, the pound-for-pound currency is trash, it's about 'right'
The coins crash to the ground cause this is what normal sounds like...
A fucking disaster.
Wu-Tang Forever
Nothing Was The Same
Txt, damn bro. With a bit of rewording here and there, this piece would've been incredible. Now, that being said, it's still a surprisingly dope read. You dropped a better piece against Mariah than I did. Props. The rhyme scheme was nice. Towards the end it started to get shaky, but you'll get better at that with experience bro. Cool read, join Scytso.
Mariah, also a dope read. But I've no complaints. So everything I said to txt, take the criticism, turn it into happy thoughts. And that's what I think about the piece. Sorry, not a good voting week for me. Throwing up, hurt stomach, sore throat etc.
Dope battle, both came with great reads.
Vote Mariah
TEXT...
"As insecurities flourish with worry and breed nervousness.
This observant girl smirks perfectly, hurried she curves her lips.
Weak-kneed her being twirls a bit as a breeze encircles it.
The reoccurring current lifts briefly then debris surfaces."
( these lines were full of imagery and had impeccable flow well done)
"Sin's a certain deterrent and hence, conversion's end.
In order to reverse this, what comes first is an urgent cleanse.
Emerge against commercialists working to conserve assertive pimps.
Curse the merchants that disturbed the immersion of inertia's prince."
(again nice vocab, stayed with that hard flow, at first I thought the inertia prince was added just for the sake of rhyming untill I read further)
"Awaiting an awakening in a nostalgic slumber.
God throws salt on the sunburns of his exhausted songbirds."
(Dope)
"Even the dead seek reckoning when in a demon's presence.
But it's easy to rest in peace while having dreams of heaven.
As the beautiful bride and a thoughtful groom bewedded.
He presented a gift: her world brought into perspective."
Sick ending I was wondering how you were gonna end this.. Nice.. the concept wasnt as clear as it could have been, but overall the flow and vocab imo top notch. really nice drop.
Mariah.
It's more than a tale, there's pages full of legs and arms
Vacant scars cover flesh without a way to blanket hearts
Immediatly dope..
"I'd find it easier to control, but I've never defined "life"
And I've never lived one either, so I guess I'm denied twice
Yes, I'm the wife type, but I'm too young within bunches
So I've got time to grow before I hold a son in my stomach"
im struggling to get why you havent lived life.. and the way I spit bunches and stomach doesnt rhyme.. again im being picky but i cant keep saying that was nice , or that was dope , so I hope you all dont hate me.
"Stories have bombed, this is life within the loneliest psalms
But these songs can leave a hole inside the core of your palm"
flow is nice.
"Abortion belongs to weak parents who can't afford to be strong"
sick line.
This savage needs no introduction, liars are politicians the same
Given the rank, these world leaders takeover all divisions in vain
Position the main focus, these missions had a vision for change
Now our freedom becomes the target for a whip and some chains
( I think the flow comparitivly in these lines was a little subpair to other areas in your verse, but in its place were some solid concepts )
"Listen, the pound-for-pound currency is trash, it's about 'right'
The coins crash to the ground cause this is what normal sounds like..."
Ending was as dope as the first 2 bars.. nice read..
I think Flow wise, Text wins.. I liked the creativity in both verses equally. they both had some very nice qoutables.. Mariah's verse to me, seemed a little tiny bit predictable but it was because she stayed on topic the whole time.
This was a very close battle, both verses had some really nice qualities imo.
Vote= Text.. better flow.. and conceptually I was feeling it a little more.
pz
texstyle-why yall make me do this..one of yall should have dropped a shitty verse so i could pick due to landslide..lol..either way..dope shit..i liked the verse..it was dope..your rhyme scheme was ill..a little shake up but nothing that threw any thing off..i liked alot of the lines and your concept in general was pretty dope..it was how it was executed that made me enjoy it..would have sounded dope recorded.
mariah-why type the same thing twice?i felt the same about your piece,i felt that even though you shine in poetry you shine pretty brightly in SS/OM..this piece was well written...ill rhyme scheme that i thought was tight i like rhyme schemes like both of these..your concept was dope.just fuckin dope as hell to me...i liked this piece a lot..so i have to vote based on personal preference,and its difficult...i was feelin both a lot,i thought both had a dope ass rhyme scheme and tight concepts..but to me texstyles just had a little more wow effect on me with a more complex rhyme scheme..no hate both dope and a dope match for sure.Originally Posted by Mariah
vote-texstyle
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Text: Hmmmm....you started off rhyming the same type of word for like 6-8 lines at least. The 'ent' sound was a bit too much. Also it seemed like only the last words on the lines rhymed at times. I liked the ending, but the piece had an odd flow to it I think.
Mariah: I liked this, there were quite a lot of clever lines that made it interesting. The pace was slower than usual but it gave each line emphasis.
\/ Mariah. I have to go against the grain here, which is surprising as I consider one a clear winner.
Text- Didn't like the beginning, the whole piece was just worded terribly imo, your flow was pretty consistent, it was just off in a few lines. I liked the concept you went at with the topic, just could of executed it much better.
Mariah- Thought you started the piece out nicely, flow was solid, liked where you went with the topic. A few lines seemed a bit stretched, threw off the flow a little, but besides that good drop.
vote- Mariah. Just had an overall better piece.
no disrespect. but could you be a bit more specific? you're saying "the piece was worded terribly" but how does that help me improve if you're not giving me any examples? for instance, show me how you would've worded one of the bars differently.
3-2 Mariah
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Yo look at my break down for this and you two can give a quick vote on my battle .. We got 1 vote so far.
Text - I like the approach, I was feeling this for the most part. I kinda strayed attention a little bit, but it definitely kept me interested. I enjoy how you ended the drop, it made it that much better so props for that. Rhyme scheme got kind of messy at parts, threw the flow off a bit. Multis were jam packed though - the only thing with that is, it seems like you really forced some rhymes and thus sacrificed growth toward the 2 former mentioned.
Overall nice.
Mariah - Drops cool, I like the approach and the way you went with it. Some dope lines in here, the switch in the middle was in good timing and it ended well. Multis were there and it's a structurally sound drop. Flow was on point as can be, rhyme scheme was cool - nothing crazy but still very on point.
Overall good drop.
v.Mariah - I have to give it to the all around more well-written piece of work.
ScytsoPhrenia
CrazyDope
Put down the pebbles in my hand, climbed a ladder, put a brick right through your window.
"You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!
Mariah wins (4-0)
Texstyle loses (0-1)
CLOSED
Legendary Song - Winter Snow
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