Sup MC's

[trixter]

I'm new here and thought I'd drop a few lines off the top of my dome.
Critique please, I want to start battles here, but I am a noob... so anything helps

Yo, So you think you a snoop
Well then I'll school you snoop
I'll kill ya with a hoola-hoop
So cool it dude before I pull you through
a sewer full of poop and make you eat it off like you a soup
I don't even have to ask that
cause I know you like to lick ass crack
don't be sick as crap and lick fags sacks
you need to be straight and don't be gay
and re-say that line like a replay while your drivin down the freeway
then you need to fuck a bitch and make her suck ya dick
shit you won't even get a hug or kiss
cause you covered in shit, smothered in dick
with your puckered lips suckin on a cum covered dick bitch

lmao, ok like I said critique me as much as possible... just here to learn and to become a better MC.

Thanks, and good to be here

[OneUGLY]

yo, at least u know how to rhyme words, that's a good start. but concepts were too simple, not too many ways 1 could have rhymed snoop with snoop, but way too simple to be effective, try words/ phrases that u normally would not have used, not saying big words neccisarily, but something u would not have thought of otherwise.

get comfortable with metaphors/ word play to help develope those tricky concepts n flow. use punchlines to deliver the energy needed to win a battle. just my thoughts tho, may hear different, but then i guess that's why god gave u ears...

[Don Q]

Rofl

[Cody Nash]

closed. read the rules.