Hip Hop Is Dead !?

[3pac]

They say hip hop is dead, so now we spit from the graves
we only sayin what people think, which is what makes them simply amazed
so put the flowers and gifts down, raps just fading away
to late to try and save it, we already past tha stage
just look to the future try to resurrect the dead in the booth
images of Pun pac and biggie, Jam J Big L an Proof
and when you capture that magic, you know these words where the truth
so no hip hop aint really dead, its just hooked up 2 an IV
so we gottta spit louder and harder, open you eyes more widly
imagination must be more syphisticated, a raps tied more tightly
we must all pull 2getha do anyfin, to stop that dreaded R..I..P !

[UltimateIllusion]

that was pretty dope, not that good vocab, structure is not bad.

imagination must be more syphisticated, a raps tied more tightly
we must all pull 2getha do anyfin, to stop that dreaded R..I..P !

I likes how you ended it, it sends a message. was a little bit short though.
I would give it 6/10.

[.Mack.]

honest opinion This was terrible Ur vocab was extremely limmited. Also there was no complexity to the piece at all not to mention the fact that the topic is way played. The best thing u had goin for u is ur structure. Then the piece is only like 10 or 11 lines OM's are supposed to be atleast 16 lines dude so try harder next time.

[Paradigmatic]

Here's my response.

I come back
Every year I get newer
I'm the dust on the moon
I'm the trash in the sewer
Let's go
I come back
Every year I get brighter
If you think Hip Hop is alive hold up your lighter

Let's go
I come back
Every year I'm expanding
Talking to developers
About the city we planning, c'mon!
I come back
Through any endeavor
This is Hip Hop
We gone last forever

Hip means to know
It's a form of intelligence
To be hip is to be up to date and relevant
Hop is a form of movement
You can't just observe a hop
You've got to hop up and do one
Hip and Hop is more than music
Hip is the knowledge
Hop is the movement
Hip and Hop is intelligent movement
Or relevant movement
We selling the music
So write this down on your black books and journals
Hip Hop culture is eternal
Run and tell all your friends
An ancient civilization has bee born again
It's a fact

I come back
Every year I'm Stronger
Krs-one, Marley Marl
Yeah we last the longest
Let's go
I come back
Cause I'm not in the physical
I create myself man I'm living the spiritual
I come back through the cycles of life
If you been here once you're gone be here twice
So I tell you
I come back
Cause you must learn too
Hip Hop culture is eternal

Hip Hop (Shan!)

Her Infinite Power
Helping Oppressed People
We are unique and unequaled

Hip Hop

Holy Integrated People
Having Omnipresent Power
The watchman's in the tower of

Hip Hop

Hydrogen Iodine Phosphorous
Hydrogen Oxygen Phosphorous
That's called

Hip Hop

The response of cosmic consciousness
To our condition is

Hip Hop

We gotta think about the children we bringing up
When Hip and Hop means intelligence springing up
We singing what?

Sickness Hatred Ignorance and Poverty
Or Health Love Awareness and Wealth
Follow me

I come back
Every year I get newer
I'm the dust on the moon
I'm the trash in the sewer
That's right
I come back
Every year I get brighter
If you think Hip Hop is alive hold up your lighter

Let's go
I come back
Every year I'm expanding
Talking to developers
About this city we planning, uhuh!
I come back
Through any endeavor
This is Hip Hop
It's gonna last forever

We will be here forever
We will still be here forever
Get what I'm saying
Forever
Marley!
Repeat
I come back
Every year I get newer
That's That
That's That

[nineties flava]

^don't know what the fuck you're doing lol...

the OM was okay... the structure was fucked in a couple of places, the topic's more played then filling in for Gotti and the flow wasn't too good but you seem to have a basic grip of the mechanics. Here's the tips I have for you (3pac):

-make sure your line length is never over 15 syllables unless you compensated in the other line (ex: the 1st is 12 syllables so the second could possibly be 18). The combined syllable lengths of both lines should rarely ever go over 30, and even that's unreccomended for beginners as it means you have to flow like AZ on Life's a Bitch/Doe or Die, which is fuckin boring to read unless you throw in some multis.

-speaking of multis, work to use a lot more of these. They improve the flow of the piece alot and hold the reader's interest.

an example of a line with a multi:
killed ya wack shit with skills that back kids away from the mic

simple but it makes the line read better. Note, however, that the multis aren't perfectly done... if they were, each syllable would sound the same. "that" and "ya" don't, so it makes it somewhat less impressive.

And the last thing I have to say is that if you gonna write about a topic, then try to think of one that's actually relevant to you... writing about shit you haven't experienced never goes too well...

so overall, this piece was about about a 5/10. It's below average, but not bad... if you use the shit I mentioned above I guarantee you'll get better alot quicker. That is, if you want to be more focused on flow (do you look up to peeps like AZ, RA, Inspectah Deck?). If you think of yourself as a punchline rapper, I can't help you there (as I'm not one). The most I can say about that is to make sure the setup actually makes sense. If it doesn't, the punch won't ring with a lot of people.

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[Paradigmatic]

^don't know what the fuck you're doing lol...

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Would you be open mouthed in disbelief if I said that I wrote the lyrics for both Hip Hop is dead and Hip Hop lives? Ever heard of the film about a large computer company stealing Intellectual Property from the college guy in his garage? Well it was based on me.

[I Write...U Bite]

Would you be open mouthed in disbelief if I said that I wrote the lyrics for both Hip Hop is dead and Hip Hop lives? Ever heard of the film about a large computer company stealing Intellectual Property from the college guy in his garage? Well it was based on me.

[Ink Poyzin]

Not a bad piece man but could use a lil work. Try workin' on some multi's and put more into your pieces.. Too short to really catch a vibe from it but I still feel where your comin' from. Hip-Hop isn't the same as it used to be with Big L, Pac, Biggie and all those legends gone. But keep writin' and i'll be looking out for more drops. Peace yo.