Black Magic: 1920

[Chris Black]

Black Magic: 1920


It’s time for a talk, with just you & me.
You’re about to hit puberty,
so things wont be the same as they used to be.
Soon, the grief will confront you.
The white world will shun you,
& you’ll have no one to run too,
but I’ll show you some Black Magic.
Because life without it is a tad tragic,
so, little lad, grab this:
My guitar, & start practice.
Let your heart grab bliss,
through the melody & patterns,
before life gives you that sad kiss,
letting you know that you’re less than human;
Less than a white man,
& you’re not even light skinned,
so you’re not allowed to be like them,
or get into the world that they thrive in,
but you see that still, I grin.
It’s because of Black Magic: Black Art.
In the face of adversity, I laugh hard,
because, through my guitar, I can grab stars,
rearrange them & own the sky.
So, boy, don’t moan & cry.
Don’t let them take what belongs to I. . Us. . We.
This art will save you, so trust me.
In America you’re anything but free,
but dreams: no one can touch these,
so clutch these with your heart & soul.
Puberty is the start of the cold,
& reality is enough to make you earl,
So play that guitar, Black Magic, & escape the world




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[Soule]

That was beautiful. Pure incredible. Amazing read Chris.

Lines that really brought my attention around were ..

It’s because of Black Magic: Black Art.
In the face of adversity, I laugh hard,
because, through my guitar, I can grab stars,
rearrange them & own the sky.
So, boy, don’t moan & cry.
Don’t let them take what belongs to I. . Us. . We.
This art will save you, so trust me.
In America you’re anything but free,
but dreams: noone can touch these,
so clutch these with your heart & soul.
Puberty is the start of the cold,
& reality is enough to make you earl,
So play that guitar, Black Magic, & escape the world

Those were just amazing, with LEGENDARY written all of it man. Any kid living through Poverty and racism along with breaching puberty could relate to this piece [not me because I'm IRISH and I hit it when I was fuckin' 9]. The wordplay within it all was awsome. Placement and choice of words was right on the dot. BULLS EYE!!!! The Imagery was incredible, painted a fucking masterpiece gallery into my mind man. The emotion was straight forward and all in all the best piece in SS this week. Keep writing dude.

[Engivale]

Wow man. nice read, good to see you writing. This was pretty powerful, I like the quick rhyme schemes you do with the two-word punch repeats, it flows nice, makes your points powerful. Just like BOOM BOOM BOOM, pretty cool, man.

It’s time for a talk, with just you & me.
You’re about to hit puberty,
so things wont be the same as they used to be.
Soon, the grief will confront you.
The white world will shun you,
& you’ll have no one to run too,
but I’ll show you some Black Magic.
Because life without it is a tad tragic,
so, little lad, grab this:
My guitar, & start practice.
Let your heart grab bliss,

Great opening, here. It grabbed me immediately. I was really impressed with all of it, the flow, the immediate point of what you're going to be getting at. Just a fun opener.

Less than a white man,
& you’re not even light skinned,
so you’re not allowed to be like them,
or get into the world that they thrive in,
but you see that still, I grin.
It’s because of Black Magic: Black Art.
In the face of adversity, I laugh hard,
because, through my guitar, I can grab stars,

My fav part ^^^^, fantastic, man. Just a great piece of writing, it's very conversational still and remains this tone the whole piece. You never get overly preachy or anything, its very matter-of-fact.

Don’t let them take what belongs to I. . Us. . We.
This art will save you, so trust me.
In America you’re anything but free,
but dreams: no one can touch these,

Good ending. The last few lines seemed a tad forced on second review, but eh, the piece as a whole is really entertaining. I'm getting links for my piece lol and glad I saw your name on here to get a link, figured it would be worth the while. Take it ez, RTF on the collab I did with prayer when u can.

[Vincent Maestro]

Great rhyme.....nice that you chose that a person get high on an Art...
For a minute i thought black magic was gonna be some type of Drug..
9/10

[Clee]

This was beautiful to me...I liked the small simple lines, made it a much easier read..the imagery jumped out at me...I liked the concept of a black man realizing the truths of the world with age...you executed this whole drop very well...

letting you know that you’re less than human;
Less than a white man,
& you’re not even light skinned,
so you’re not allowed to be like them,

To me this summed up the piece, and I liked how you kept strong after this..I can really respect what your saying, this was a very nice read for me...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...am-353946.html

I'd appreciate any feed.

[Soule]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...le-353871.html

[Chris Black]

Feed Returned.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...am-353946.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...le-353871.html

[Ntalek]

This was dope..I really cant say anything that hasnt' already been said..but this was just brillant..from the rhyme scheme...to the imagery and emotion..this was just one huge ball of fire...on a steady roll...your ability to keep the reader captured..into the write..is major...the concept itself..you took to another level..and just wrapped it all together lovely..I read this in SS and thought the same..so yeah..this is another graet drop that'll be in my fav's...good drop..

[Judge Judy]

chris, this was actually a SICK ass read. i liked it, it was simple, but sooo effective. i read it before, but i guess ill leave you some feedback now considering witness stated he was droppin, but never did! lol, it sucks to see this piece be a no show, witness would of had to come with a dynamite drop to top this, so it would of been good. But, shit happens. I really like how you interpreted the topic, Black Magic. sick, i mean, it seems to me that everyone is writing about guitars now-a-days, but this is deffinetely, the most original yet...these lines were sick.

Quote:
It’s because of Black Magic: Black Art.
In the face of adversity, I laugh hard,
because, through my guitar, I can grab stars,
rearrange them & own the sky.
So, boy, don’t moan & cry.
Don’t let them take what belongs to I. . Us. . We.
This art will save you, so trust me.
In America you’re anything but free,
but dreams: noone can touch these,

so simple...but again, fucking dope. i dont know how you do it, everyones so concentrated on making it LOOK dope, rather than it actually being it, focusing on the extreme vocab, but here, you pulled it off great without it. Props dude, i love your work.

Pz.

i really want to collab with you chris...if you ever want to, PM me, also, when you get time, hit this up.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6073358

[complete registr]

you have talent

[Witty]

Upping this. Thanks for following the rules.