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    Lightbulb Eulogy for Me

    ….Eulogy for Me
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    . . I was……
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    A man who stood with his emotions worthless
    Drowning in a sea of apathy, never breaking the surface
    A hard kid…one who smiled at the Devil and said
    “by gones are bye gones where in this level its spread”
    Hopes went over the horizon, and faded to dusk
    An erosion of soul where it then erased in the rust
    Trapped in a see through cell for many ages of time
    A destiny forgotten in His plan of pages and lines
    ..
    ….was I patient in mind, rather erasing the signs!
    Never made the cut in this so called stage of my life
    I was a man who stood tall in site, but full of cowardice
    Never meant gravity inside when I said theres no pull to power shit
    A witness to see that LOVE is really L.ying O.ver V.ivid. E.ssence
    In timid lessons I learned to breathe in her livid Presence
    I was the inner depth soul of our peoples slave songs
    While she was the owner’s anger from hearing it days long
    ..
    …pacing back in forth, knowing that I should believe in the role
    …………….Breathing my last airs until God then needed my soul
    In the pitch black of night, I count the stars in the skies
    A hit past the hole in my life, so it’s a par to the wise
    A scar in the size….that sliced away life high and vertically
    Eyes rolled back to my brain, as Torture let off with a sigh that urgently
    He was done with his job, feasting on the mass of my joy
    Then laughed brilliantly finishing his task on this boy
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    I tried hard in life, but came out empty inside
    Corrupted in stride by the amount of envy and pride
    Those that knew me know I’m smiling and leavened
    …and ill do my best to come again and haunt you from heaven

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    UPPin Feeds......
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    yo thios was tight you had the elements and an original idea i was feeling that some places were basic but still fed rioght .

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    I agree with my twin here i think that was awsome had the sweetest flow went extreamly well with the vocab
    And all that gibberish
    that you were spittin'
    you need to kill it
    Cas your style is like dying in my sleep
    , I don't feel it

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    sick vocab and spit, very nice man. i rly liked

    pacing back in forth, knowing that I should believe in the role
    …………….Breathing my last airs until God then needed my soul
    In the pitch black of night, I count the stars in the skies
    A hit past the hole in my life, so it’s a par to the wise

    you make me wanna up my game.
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    Nice, enjoyed reading. Vocab was really nicely used. I thought at some points the lines were a tiny bit to strung out, but near perfection. Very easy to follow, and nice imagry.

    A witness to see that LOVE is really L.ying O.ver V.ivid. E.ssence
    In timid lessons I learned to breathe in her livid Presence
    Awesome line. Keep it up!

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    this was a cool piece. i liked the way it was never to extreme in delivering the message. alot of times people get really intense when they try to write emotionally, but you had a real soothing tone of concern. the rhyming was nice too, consistant. overall it was just a really good piece, glad i saw this. keep it up man
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    GhostFlow I'ma kick your ass for waking me up for this.

    This piece was nice. I Njoi'd it. The vocab was good,imagery was nice,structure was well doesnt matter in this.I liked your approach. This again was good.
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    90% How You React To It.

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    Thanx for the feed....much respect
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