this was a very nice peice,you had everything in this,although I have seen better.....you had a nice structure and it was very easy to read,the flow was very good, I have only read a few of your peices and I have loved every single one of them,and beilieve me when I say,not a lot of people have me loving their writing. I think you may have rushed the ending, it seemed like you just couldn't be bothered to write anymore so you finished it as quick as you could, but it still turned out fine in my eyes...nice peice,keep at it