Pain

[501]

I'm cuttin the pain tonight/
It's the only thing that seems right/
As I sit here thinkin in my room/
Sweepin up my flaws like one sweeps dirt with a broom/
Thoughts flood my mind and I begin to rhyme/
Wonderin why peeps fall instead of shine/
Wonderin why violence and crime continue to rise/
Wonderin why kids being molested and chastised/
These acts keepin souls locked up/
Teens chillin now a days with their glocks up/
I aint ever been locked up in the pen/
Never been convicted and thrown in for ten/
This ain't the way it's supposed to be/
But still fightin to keep my soul free/
Like a boxer trains for da big night/
I train to keep my soul right/
Puttin da heat on da page again/
Aint appologizin for da hate within/
Towards those that committ these types of sins/
Lyrically spittin truth and purposely bringin forth reality/
Again, this aint the way it's supposed to be/

[EyeCandy]

hmm very basic & simple.. elavate on a real.. u need links also, read the rules.

[justrude]

this is gonna get closed, you dont have any links.

[Quest.]

very basic material...and also u need to leave links before brixton put his foot in your ass.....u need to elevate much on your vocab...i see your a noweight so u have room to improve.....and also Title your OM when u post......this lacked emotion, your structure was fine....needs more creativity....say something like nobody has said it before.....make people want to read more of your stuff.... overall elevate much on everything except for structure....keep the the same peace