i think people are really lookin pas this 4 HOF nominations! lol
lmao
dope piece like this would really like something 2 retire on!
igh
probably last up 4 me ...
i think people are really lookin pas this 4 HOF nominations! lol
lmao
dope piece like this would really like something 2 retire on!
igh
probably last up 4 me ...
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Uppin I'll be gone for another 2 weeks...love yall...
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Uppin...whatz good? Back for a day...uppin older fire...this shits wicked...
i'm not a big fan of this type of om, having a seperate title for every verse is kinda lame to me, i think it should have jus one topic and stick to it, having said that, this was a good peice nontheless, vocab was higher level and went together while making sense, the explenations of what each verse was about, though a bad idea to me, were really good, i could actually picture you guys writing in your diary, good job guys...
Dope Peice!!! i felt the majority of it. I feel all MC's came hard and it showed. Nice wordplay and flow, and multi's, and punches... Jus all around a dope drop, props to all MC's.
Uppin Old Flames...Love yall bye!
^^lmao at the up after 2 weeks...WORD THOUGH!
were have u been nash....its been awhile!
UPPING I SUPPOSE!
vamp:
A binding of emotional treasures buried under a cover
Memories of friends, life, lovers that vary from another
Each page screaming sentimental interests of time
To capture life freezing moments you often leave behind
...dope opener...
Secrets sworn independently to vanish from wandering eyes
To take pride in each line,to alter life as a guide in disguise
Closest friend,unless evil reaks a page with your deepest fear
Frustration spills on a paper swollowing your most ungrateful tear
.....and....some more dope lines^
Your whole verse was good, infact all of these were good, im just pointing out my fav lines of yours. You seem to write with deep thought and emotion, which was nice.
VAfinest:
Today I did somethin wrong, that I will never regret
It started out with a dice game, people were making there bets
Tryin to get there lucky number, but it was never rolled
I was taking everybodys stash, and I started counting all my tolls
And I saw 50 was missing, so I filled up with anger
Asked,"Who took some dough", they said nothin cuz they were in danger
Then someone admitted, body shaking with fear
Cuz they knew somethin was gonna happen......
....................sweat on his skin pourin like tears
He said,"I didn't even bet", he really thought he was slick
So I just played along, and his ass got hit
Cuz he thought it was cool, but I took it kind of different
Started making him bleed, then he was dead in an instant
I just started throwing punches, he felt like he was gettin hit with a brick
But he got the consiquence, now hes a dead prick
And now I feel the sarrow, cuz his family is going through pain
But in a way,don't give a fuck, cuz the boy was insane
He was put under pressure, cuz he didn't know the outcome
Now hes stuffed like a doll, cuz he was thinking so dumb
So thats how my day was, and I will remember it to the end
Now lets shut my diary, before I commit another sin
...the whole fuckin verse was dope, and what was so good about it was the fact that you didnt even get that complex with it. you kept it pretty simple for the most par. i enjoyed reading it. I mean they said you were doing an emotional diary entry, and it was fuckin dope as hell. nice shit.
Spekz
My soul erupts into rhyme as I Preach forth into the story of me
All the words my mouth cant say my heart and hand work as one to write this diary
My pen is the gateway for my soul to fly free as exstacy envelopes brain
As My pen scribbles across the page, I'm soothed, like a slow walk in the rain
Soul spoken thoughts ment for the eyes of one,feelings layed upon stone
A pact between god and I ,Sealed in blood, classified for my eyes only
Containing Trials and tribulation..disrespect and descention since birth
The struggle for respect, Percavir’n for a positive effect to gain self worth
Layin down the memories of the experiences Fullfillment Of Lovin for the first time
Peacefull bliss and nothing less, body rapture captured forever by words so fine
Long has it been Since I've writtin, A tidal wave of thoughts beg to be immortalized
Furiously I trace the history of memories, Timelines Of deceit,defeat and wants denied
....best lines of your verse. i was really feelin em. i havent really seen much of anything from you before, but this was still very dope. the rest of them seemed a little too stretched out, but these lines were creative, thoughtful and had good wordplay.
Nash:
Thoughtlessness flutters through the blank pages of the book,
Breathlessness flows through their minds. Spirits are Took…
Look on and read as the words just flow. See the person grow,
Stop, Think, and Re-read the no rhymed verses ever so slow.
You must know how to treat the feelings the person passes…
…Or this concealing karma will explode. Then Faith Crashes,
My attention snatches the attentions of the viewers Passions…
Write down what you’re thinking, Guys Love, Girls Fashions.
Loves, warfare, and blastin’…main and endless cause of poets,
Reap what you sew and here’s the world as all of you know it.
Inside the book of art on his or her life, Feelings about his wife,
Feelings that will hurt your insides like a knife. That’s the hype,
Wordless diaries are the ones typed. Listen to the wind, and me,
But only to a certain degree, Spirituality and Sea to shining Sea,
Individuality lusts and begins the wonders of the faith and trust,
Listening to them is like listening to your woman, only a must,
A must do! Break my feelings down to the crust, core of thought,
Feelings no longer feel good, memories are feeling-less…………
……………………………………...............………And always distraught,
Information to one’s self…who’s hot who’s not? Heat of Night,
Loveless and delight combine in the same small book of rights,
Who is and isn’t polite. Breaching all the barriers and limits…
…I live for the days, months, and years. Not just the minutes,
She writes down the breaching point of her life…the ecstasy,
Her world is no longer a memory, it becomes reality…hopefully-
She will take the world ever so nicely and much more seriously,
Intimacy no longer pleasures…drastic measures…endings…......
.................................................. ....the death of the diary.
....hehe once again nash, dope dope dope. i posted yours and va's verse because i feel you guys just came totally dope. vamp and spekz, yes they had good verses, just felt they could have been just a bit better, but not much, still all very good. and nash yours had good creativity, thoughtfullness, wordplay and you seemed to just write deeply here.
overall, very dope collab from all of you, and keep it up, for real. one.
ther emothion in this piece was real deep you got a real good topic aswell, yopur structure was one of the best iv seen 2day peace
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Thanx....again the short fb will do u kno justice!
i give it to all of ya, this was a nice peice and the topic was creative, ya did excellent all i want to know was this a crew thing cause i want to be down, so pm me ya and ill tryout aight but it was good kepp up the good work. I give this a 9.5/10, good joint
^^na we all juss did it....juss kinda happend!...
**check out my latest ish... .::Lurking From The Shadows::. link in sig, and drop some of ur work in here or links or something..and ill hit it up...depending on ur style..im always down 4 collabs