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Thread: *The Forgotten Journey*

  1. October 29th, 2005, 07:35 AM #1
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    Exclamation *The Forgotten Journey*

    Rabid sandstorms were brewed in deserts as their skies obtained an Arabian Curse
    The firm carrier's Cranium Burst when I originated upside-down through an Alien Birth
    Evolved magical tentacles that burned intergallactical chemicals at the Speed Of Light
    Presented the clinical poise to Breed The Nights and fight the knights with a Need To Write
    Alive With Health, I formulated Nebulas flame and compelled the adversary to Arrive 'n Melt
    He escaped with Surprisin Welts as I realized my corruption 'n blazed through Orions Belt
    Traveled and rambled the blue planet as the soil Weeped Mud that caused a Deep Flood
    On an expedition I explored egyptian corridors 'n marked the doors with a Sheeps Blood
    Dug graves to floss fossils of deceased pharaohs with secrets that would Shock The Past
    Sped away with a Rocket Blast, using wings as I sliced the darkness with a Flock Of Bats
    Hissing with torched breath and sword teeth, we forcefully Swarmed Into A Campfire
    Fusion of my skin layers distorted the mortal's course so I Morphed Into A Vampire
    With my hungry fangs, I led an assembly of furious Stallions On A Spectacular March
    Victorious against mammoths cuz I was equipped with a Medallion Of A Draculas Heart
    Declared an end to all pawns when my Rook Was Cloned with the flag of Crooked Bones
    Overpowered the reigning kings royalty and caused earthquakes when I Took The Throne
    My presence opened the gates that unleashed the wrath that Fractured The Last World
    I sailed the lavas of hell and made Satan walk the plank as I Captured The Black Pearl
    Sewed and stitched the furs of a caveman and didnt stop til I had Woven Three Quilts
    I fled free through the red sea to Greece 'n Roamed On Three Stilts til Rome Was Re-built
    Floated in the oceans with the opponents that emerged and impelled me to Swim Deeper
    Now Im being acquainted with my demise by shaking hands with the Grim Reaper...

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  2. October 29th, 2005, 07:38 AM #2
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  3. October 29th, 2005, 11:52 AM #3
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    Damn son this shit was hot, looks like ive got some competition when it comes to flow and imagery this piece had it all very impressive. The concept was very original and strange so obviously i was really feeling it. Your vocab was perfect but it seemed effortless the way you wrote the piece and you never once overused your vocab which is always a plus point. Your imagery matched extremely well with your vocab very descriptive and dark you set the scene and drew me into the piece after the opening couplet. I would quote lines but i dont say this too often there were way too many to write.
    Not only was the vocab and imagery tight your flow was also on point a lot of multies so it was just a very complex piece and i loved reading it and im a cocky bastard so i say that rare. Your a very talented writer i'll be looking forward to your next Om welcome to the site nice to see some new dope writers on Om.
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  4. October 29th, 2005, 12:47 PM #4
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    Thanx for the nice breakdown. I'll return the feed no doubt.

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  5. October 29th, 2005, 01:58 PM #5
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    C'mon, dont sleep

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  6. October 30th, 2005, 10:14 AM #6
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    Not only was the vocab and imagery tight your flow was also on point a lot of multies so it was just a very complex piece and i loved reading it and im a cocky bastard so i say that rare. Your a very talented writer i'll be looking forward to your next Om welcome to the site nice to see some new dope writers on Om.
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  7. October 30th, 2005, 03:07 PM #7
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    it was good real good
    the fool was sick
    the vocab was good
    the structure was good in the right places
    i give it a 9/10

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  8. October 31st, 2005, 02:49 PM #8
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    Thanx for da feed

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  9. October 31st, 2005, 03:03 PM #9
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    warchild fuck you
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