Nib Oswald (5-1) Vs. Julius (5-4)

[Tim]

Nib Oswald (5-1) Vs. Julius (5-4)
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[Julius Caesar]

Bam ma ma ma Blockie me!. (Check)

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post3236732
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...776post3236776

[Nib Oswald]

It's no rumour, I'm numero duo.

[Nathan Weatheral]

It's no rumour, I'm numero duo.

white pale wid no facail you must ha ve been scared to come out ya mums pussy cause sayin that shit its rare you must have been scared to come out and see what the worlds about

[Nib Oswald]

^I feel honoured to be that bloke's first post. LMAO

[Julius Caesar]

I was in Tampa watching that antonio vs roy-jones fight...shit...antonio won...word...



-A BABY-

I saw you when you first came inside attach in your mother arm,
a smile across your face, expressing your highly sweet good charm.
That's the day when it all started, watched you cry late at night,
Tears coming down from your eyes, to me that was a hurtful sight.
I couldn’t do anything, stood there cold in fear, so i sung a song,
Open my mouth and your little ears witness the sound "ding dong"
There must've been a "dam" in his eyes cause the tears stopped,
From that point on, my fears decreased and my worry dropped.
One Minute you smiled at me then you went to sleep in the darkness,
watched to make you were ok, guarded tight that night like being
...strapped in a harness.

-A TEENAGER-

It was during this time that you showed your depression,
your heart was being ripped into sections, flame of regression,
trapped inside of you, tried so hard to let it go but it was hard,
felt scarred, wishing instead of being an object-be a peace card.
I see in your eye's the hurt when you saw your mother casket fall,
From the effect of a bomb your world blew into pieces-as tears bawl.
Felted that I wanted to cry also, instead of that i sung you a song,
Open my mouth and your ears witness the beautiful sound-"ding dong".
You said, "I'll have to cherish the memories. I’m going to stay strong",
From that Point on, you tucked and sucked your tears away and
....moved along.

-ADULT-

Happiness is back into play, your married and got 2 beautiful kids,
a wife by your side that who healed your deepest wounds of slits.
I remember that time you was smiling when you brought her here,
she was in your arms looking like an white dove with wings
..that conceal your fear.
9 years passed and your standing outside of your house window,
The tears that course down your cheek don't dry up as the wind blows.
I can tell the rage is exploding in you seeing your wife lips not on you,
your mind is all confuse, love of plague sickness heating up- like flu.
you trickled, blood flicker, your splenetic feelings going crazy my son,
breathing trying to regain conscious-took your kids. feeling relax
....when you heard my song

-THE GRAVE-

This house holds too many bad memories. I see you quivering,
shaking-thinking what should you do to about this agony aching.
Can't take it no more I see, feeling like your in the middle of hell,
brain cells going out of control, can't move your trapped in a cell.
there's only one thing to do to take care of this and that is to burn it,
let it go down in ashes, fire flicker while you outside- laughing.
O my son...leaving me too soon?...my woods is getting churned,
burned. Guess my time is up as you hear the father clock go
"ding dong"..as into ashes I turn.

[Nib Oswald]

Black hearts of these devils of gambling and sin
Delinquents who play with a scandalous grin
Sly gambits and wry underhandedness wins
Vile animals cloaked in a camouflage skin
White diamonds now sparkling bright as your prize
Enticed by big bucks, but you’ve blinded your eyes
Your mind’s glowing darkly with chuckles and sighs
Denying how starkly you’re entwined in vice
Red clubs have degraded and tainted your soul
Invaded your morals, left jaded as coal
They’ve stolen your pain but you fade from your whole
You aim now for goals that have shaded your all
Grey spades churn up earth from our cradles to graves
These players decayed into evil, the knaves
Such slaves are depraved in behaviour, deceived
You’ll pay when Fate plays out an Ace from his sleeve

You’re tokenless, broke now from poker and meth
The smoke of the joker will choke you to death

[2hot2handle]

Damn nib, i was hopin youd go longer. This goes to Caesar cause he was better organized,decent vocab, and great structure. It flowed well and brought the topic in a better sense.

Nib, you did better but it was short. U had a good thing goin but stopped. Ya had better vocab but wasnt as organized or set up like Caesar. Caesar had better way of expression and nib ya flow was good but Caesar had better structure and organization than you.

vote- Julius Caesar

[Johnny 6-feet]

Julius Caesar- A good take on the topic with a nice twist at the end and a good sense of pace and plot development which kept me reading. Your use of vocab could've been better, and your rhyme scheme could've been a lto of stronger. But you kept your imagery clear and told a good story. Solid work.

Nib Oswald- Short and abrupt man, i felt you could've engaged more closely with the title than you did. The use of card suits in your rhymes was a nice touch, you also came with strong vocab (just at the right level) and a good rhyme scheme with good use of multi's throughout. The imagery was there but occasionally vague. It became clearer as the piece went on though. I wish this had been longer.


Vote- Julius Caesar, for a better take on the title and stronger imagery. He told a better story and had a better illustraited story. If Nib had developed his piece more he could've took this, his superior vocab and rhyme scheme weren't enough to swing it in my opinion.

[Brother Blue Collar]

vote jc

[Tim]

Julius Caesar had a nice verse felt what was being said the whole way down liked how it ened also Nibs you did ight but i felt you could have done a little better the verse wasnt complete in my eyes

vote........jc

[Tim]

Julius Wins (6-4)
Nib Oswald Loses (5-2)