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Thread: Destiny....

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    Destiny....

    Everybody got dreams of what da future beholds dem
    Praying ta god to wish it happens ending it wit AMEN
    Ya niether follow what you want,and what you need in life
    Rather than relieving da pain,cuttin ya self wit a fuckin knife
    Cause you know it's tru,whether ya down right blu
    Sniffin glu aint gon help cause it ends wit AAH-CHOO
    And den ya get so sick,you'll think of gettin sum'mo
    suckin on dat cigarette like a dick,tellin ya gurl she a ho
    But ya dont mean dat,and ya know it,you just so ill
    From all dat sniffin,smokin,and drinkin,ya almost killed
    To da point in ya life where you just wanna die
    End ya life so quiklly...buried wit so many lies
    Where da truth cant be told,but da lies start ta unfold
    Ya family starts ta think"how could he be just so cold?"
    And you re-gret what you've did,but hell nothing to do
    Bet now you wish there was someone lookin out for you
    There aint shit,cause you da fool in da game who lost
    Instead ya coulda followed ya dreams now look at da cost
    Thats why you gotta do what ya do and be wat ya be
    Cuz bein like me is something you dont wanna have as ya destiny....
    Last edited by Plain-Thug; August 8th, 2005 at 11:19 PM

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    this piece was very simple...your rhyme scheme and you vocab were very simple...you piece flowed well...you wordplay was simple and you could have used some complexity and some elevated vocabulary.....this piece had emotion though...not bad....keep droppin and elevatin.~1~


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    uppin for feeback......C'mon people...............

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    the good thing about this piece was that it was simple, yet meaningful. im sure alotta of people can relate to times like these. its not neccesarly good times but thats how life is right, you did a good job and conveying that message with a nice straight-forward approach. a piece like this may have been improved but sometimes u just wanna read simple verses like these, nice job man. good message. hit this one up in return please.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=219061

    thanks you.

    peACE


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    shit. wrong link my man. hit this please.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=220503

    thanks.


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