Nice shit, Jekyll...
You should write topical more often.
Although I felt this particular topic was a bit contrite...I think you pulled it off.
A fresher topic, one not so preachy woulda been nice.
This one's been driven into the ground...but I guess you kinda hint to that in your rhyme when you mention "will anyone notice this".
Anyway...for me...I really prefer a story over someone telling me how they think and why I should think the same way...too preachy.
But you kept a nice flow, coulda used a bit more multis, but still...
It was smooth.
Good vocab, nothing crazy, but nothing "cat & dog" about it.
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