All On Me(deep shit)

[YJ]

Verse 1 is a luvish verse
Verse 2 is deepish

LM - Loving To Hate
Withersman - Cry ft. Manet

(verse 1)
boo I promised I was gonna take care of you
and be there for you, I was gonna stay true
relationship been crappy n you like my style
I gotta keep you happy, gotta make you smile
tryna make this head into the right direction
provide you wit what you need like protection
tryin 2 keep our luv n this special connection
love and life... makes a perfect intersection
lets keep it that way, I can't see you racing
out my door, can't find another girl replacin
a luv like yours and boo I don't have control
of your life, ma I am just touching your soul
to me you are sumthin in life that I never had
keepin u n' havin u as my wife I would be glad
but fo dat to happen it depends on my attitude
cuz if I fuck up on you, babygurl I am screwed
and you know I am rude and I forgot to include
that, I am in process of getting my life glued
back 2gether, so boo tell me whats it gonna be
cuz the future fo us, is what I am tryin 2 see
the path fo us both is paved but its ALL ON ME

(hookx2)
if you look deeper, you can see collisions
bcuz I have been making sum dumb decisions
life n friends aren't in the same division
for me, Jonny a rapper?, I cannot envision
that, a positive person is what I'm tryna be
n' for that to happen nigga, it is all on me

(Verse 2)
Never thought it would happen, me next in line
becoming a leader now is sumthin that is blind
to me, now my pops is gettin a little bit older
gotta act bolder, even if my heart turns colder
gray hair is developing n' shits on my shoulder
if pop dies tomorrow, I become the family holder
everything rests on me, but I am not a good leader
because I cannot fix errors! as in a proof reader
but I gotta learn someday I might as well learn
to be a man today n watch my teenage years burn
away n I don't got luv but my peeps are concerned
bout me, bein here where I am 2day was neva earned
it was given to me because all my life I've been
slackin, somehow I find a way to conquer and win
wit all my sins dat r pumpin from my cold ass heart
I'm tryna be what I can but the devil rips me apart
its all on me

(hook)

[White Lines]

nice nice

[White Lines]

is dat based on a true story?

[YJ]

kinda but its tru dat my pops is gettin old

[YJ]

upp

[YJ]

upp

[YJ]

wats wrong RB? only 1 reply?

[YJ]

upp

[DUNGEON]

nice flow u did your thang on this one keep em coming

[Ace of Aces]

not a bad verse. its good becuz it was based on reality. props, sorry it happened tho. anyway, the flow and structure were good. but there were times where the flow was off, a little choppy. the meaning of this is probably its strongets aspect. decent vocab. props for this. i like it. hit mines up wen you see it. thanx.

peace

[YJ]

thanks