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    All On Me(deep shit)

    Verse 1 is a luvish verse
    Verse 2 is deepish

    LM - Loving To Hate
    Withersman - Cry ft. Manet

    (verse 1)
    boo I promised I was gonna take care of you
    and be there for you, I was gonna stay true
    relationship been crappy n you like my style
    I gotta keep you happy, gotta make you smile
    tryna make this head into the right direction
    provide you wit what you need like protection
    tryin 2 keep our luv n this special connection
    love and life... makes a perfect intersection
    lets keep it that way, I can't see you racing
    out my door, can't find another girl replacin
    a luv like yours and boo I don't have control
    of your life, ma I am just touching your soul
    to me you are sumthin in life that I never had
    keepin u n' havin u as my wife I would be glad
    but fo dat to happen it depends on my attitude
    cuz if I fuck up on you, babygurl I am screwed
    and you know I am rude and I forgot to include
    that, I am in process of getting my life glued
    back 2gether, so boo tell me whats it gonna be
    cuz the future fo us, is what I am tryin 2 see
    the path fo us both is paved but its ALL ON ME

    (hookx2)
    if you look deeper, you can see collisions
    bcuz I have been making sum dumb decisions
    life n friends aren't in the same division
    for me, Jonny a rapper?, I cannot envision
    that, a positive person is what I'm tryna be
    n' for that to happen nigga, it is all on me

    (Verse 2)
    Never thought it would happen, me next in line
    becoming a leader now is sumthin that is blind
    to me, now my pops is gettin a little bit older
    gotta act bolder, even if my heart turns colder
    gray hair is developing n' shits on my shoulder
    if pop dies tomorrow, I become the family holder
    everything rests on me, but I am not a good leader
    because I cannot fix errors! as in a proof reader
    but I gotta learn someday I might as well learn
    to be a man today n watch my teenage years burn
    away n I don't got luv but my peeps are concerned
    bout me, bein here where I am 2day was neva earned
    it was given to me because all my life I've been
    slackin, somehow I find a way to conquer and win
    wit all my sins dat r pumpin from my cold ass heart
    I'm tryna be what I can but the devil rips me apart
    its all on me

    (hook)
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    nice nice

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    is dat based on a true story?

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    kinda but its tru dat my pops is gettin old
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
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    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    upp
    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    wats wrong RB? only 1 reply?
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    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    BEST OF YJ
    Holla at cha Boi
    Watch Me
    Eyez of a Young Nigga
    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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    nice flow u did your thang on this one keep em coming
    u to fragile to fuck with my 20 ton rap style
    i'm unbreakable i'll thump and u fall apart like samual jackson when it get wild
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    not a bad verse. its good becuz it was based on reality. props, sorry it happened tho. anyway, the flow and structure were good. but there were times where the flow was off, a little choppy. the meaning of this is probably its strongets aspect. decent vocab. props for this. i like it. hit mines up wen you see it. thanx.

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    thanks
    BEST OF YJ
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    Can't Forget yall
    Luv sick
    I can't Believe It(RIP Denise)

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