demise world

[demise]

yo...i dont talk much.....


i dont say much, life had struggles... in the head i stained much, like ciggarets i haze strong kill from inside you, i dont play fuck a coward i drane you, just cause im young my head playin the real life, you locked in my scope, on every corner is one of me, druggd out past out with a duby tree....this is demise world, that mean death is comin for all of us, thats one of the variables that dont change like a dirty freak........this be demise world...............

yo test mic....t
this has been a test of the emergency broad cast system...........this is only a test........


yo im new to this rap shit.....so for a test how it go down?

[demise]

yo....ya tell me how to improve ....and shit.....every little thing counts......like i said....this is my first post....and im new to the freestyle shit.......1 luv.....hate me or not

[demise]

dont sleep people!!!!!!!!!!!!

[sILLable]

if you wanna improve first thing is,your words are good but most off it didnt even rhyme,,second when you get shit rhymin then you wanna put in doubles and punchlines, a double is like, {with out weapons i found away to kill-you...fill you up with mildew.}
a double from mildew is kill-you, a punch line is like, [ your gayer by far such,,flamin ass havin drinks at starbucks] thats a shitty onne but its a punchline.jus take everybodys advice and practice everyday jst sit back throw an instrumental get blazed and freestyle. keep on practicin and postin,keep ya head up,peace god.