Ocular Cannibals

[TheIllyricist]

They say beauty is in the eye,
So, eat the I that beholds you,
Canines and molars sink
Into marrow and bone,
Crushed; powder, blood rust
Mashed to crimson pulp so savory,
Bathing an obsessive tongue
Wriggling in starved need
For an awed and curious audience;
Behold, flesh, gargled and swallowed--
Ahhh…
Nothing speaks like murdercide,
Bodies entangled in question:
Are you food, or are you sex?
I, Cannibal, devour with the oculus
Plates full of meat, sensual sways,
Glances of sin.

We growled, not our stomachs.

[Emily]

They say beauty is in the eye,
So, eat the I that beholds you, lol, very clever.
Canines and molars sink
Into marrow and bone, aaaaand here we go. loving the descriptions so far.
Crushed; powder, blood rust your spin on words is great. 'blood rust' is awesome.
Mashed to crimson pulp so savory, and I like the structure and pace of this as well.
Bathing an obsessive tongue
Wriggling in starved need yeah, that's very nice Illy.
For an awed and curious audience; this makes all the difference. there's more of you lol.
Behold, flesh, gargled and swallowed--
Ahhh…
Nothing speaks like murdercide, nice.
Bodies entangled in question:
Are you food, or are you sex? you do the dark side very well.
I, Cannibal, devour with the oculus
Plates full of meat, sensual sways,see how this sick sentence works so well? so do I lol.
Glances of sin.

We growled, not our stomachs. I like the nauseating outro.

TheIllyricist, you've made something quite small, humongous and heinous.
The scope of gruesomeness is tantalisingly inviting to read.
The vileness mixed with a sexual nature is truly uncalled for and very welcomed lol.
It's off-putting, but in a good way.

I think you did a good job on this one, showing us once more how talented you are, not only
on the romantic, renaissance side of things, but with gore and grotesque subjects.
You write both well, and mix both well.

Great read.

Thank you.