@OG Maestro @SELF ACTIVATE
WEEK 1
OG Maestro vs SELF ACTIVATE
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American Beauty
A Song of Ice and Fire
Miscalculating Dissertation
Manipulative Sequestration
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Best Topical Writer: 143
In...
King me.
'Who are YOU?' Asked the Caterpillar.
" I hardly know, Sir. I know who I WAS, but I think I must have changed."Cheshire Dreams
I woke up stuck
inside a construct
dumbfounded
by my surroundings
and awestruck!
What the FUCK
was going on?
Why was I so
conscious
and self-aware?
The answer? It wasn't clear - The "logic": just wasn't there!
But honest ... I didn't care! I promise ...I wasn't scared!
No cautions or mental fears - my problems throughout the years?
My spirit was unprepared - my ego was in control!
A product of social code to mold me into a drone
Since Moses's Holy Stones and Romulus founded Rome
As old as the catacombs that keep the scattered bones
Of priest that mattered most - hide secrets they never told
Like keys to free my soul...the reason that I exist?
My piece completes the WHOLE! Can "teach" me how to think,
But wisdom is what I KNOW! Instinctively, from the 'go'
Like water my knowledge flows - it's chemistry can EXPLODE!!!
Seducing my temporal lobe so memories will unclothe
Exposing the bitter Ghost of Misery in the folds
"...remember me when I'm gone" if mentally I elope
And enter the Astro Zone to spiritually just atone
For hopin' their theories hold - neglectin' my Kundalini,
Acceptin' their isotopes - investin' in modern homes
While skippin' the rabbit holes ... If Alice is still alive
The Hatter is not alone!
Nope...
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-- SELF
I gotta say that you are transforming every drop I see. You are starting to make your drop almost 3-D like with the play on structure ans wording. This is is nothing short of genius. I was going to post a video of me spitting this as the flow was water like. You played on a lot of imagery in this with the highlight being the Alice line. Again I like how you all are tackling more than one topic because it brings extra layers into the fold of the drops. This right here is clearly one that is on the next level of writing and I can't say there is really any flaws in this. Dopeness
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Best Topical Writer: 143
Full on Eminem vibe I got here...
"...The answer? It wasn't clear - The "logic": just wasn't there!
But honest ... I didn't care! I promise ...I wasn't scared!..."
Brilliant beat in words.
"...Since Moses's Holy Stones and Romulus founded Rome
As old as the catacombs that keep the scattered bones..."
Your rhymes are so nice and smooth and the story you tell is well written.
It's really well written imo. It's got interesting storyline, obvious rhythm, soul, a shit load of technique,
vocab, imagery, I like it. Loving the multies. I like it all. Especially that flow.
I like all of it.
I like how it speeds up towards the end, going out with a bang. Can't beat it. I could quote so much.
You're a great writer self activate. You're very interesting to read. Very entertaining and edgy and sensitive Alice, lol,
you're aware, I think, of how important vulnerability is to a vulnerable reader.
I don't know. I think you just ticked off all the boxes with this one.
Like, all of em.
Top job.
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