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    Beautiful One

    I can't eat, nor sleep, nor read,
    I can't believe, nor dream, nor breath

    My everything is gone so fast,
    I think about how the times have past

    The times we shared, and
    The times we cared

    That feeling is gone, I feel so alone,
    I let out a sigh, and then a hoarse moan

    And I think to myself, Oh what have I done,
    To chase away, the beautiful sun

    The darkness encroaches, my thoughts turn bleak,
    My mind is drawn, and my soul, it is weak

    I stumble across, an unlit field,
    These feelings in me, they just will not yield

    They devour me, my strength and power,
    And I come before thee, at the darkest of hour

    I beg for truth, and I beg for mercy,
    I deem myself, to be quite unworthy

    No match at all, for thy wit and pleasure,
    I see how you glow, like a luminous treasure

    Your beauty; enchanting, your character so amazing,
    Your are a fire, forever, are blazing

    And early morning, when the candle is done,
    You enthrall me still, my beautiful one

    And as we do part, I turn in sorrow,
    A glint of hope, I do wish to borrow

    For somewhere through the shadows,
    Where the fog weighs a ton,
    I will search for you still, my beautiful one

    The sadness, the anger, my emotions that follow,
    Penetrate to hearth, but the organ proves hollow

    I loved and I lost, and the pain is overbearing,
    My beautiful one, you were to patient and caring

    They say, that which does not kill you, indeed makes you stronger,
    But I'm not quite sure, if I should try any longer

    My life seems so shattered, and my mind is a blur,
    And what is it I search for, is there really a cure?

    This heartbreak takes over, but I must push this aside,
    My mind tells me one thing, but my heart won't abide

    The damage is permanent, it cannot be undone,
    But I'll still love you forever, my beautiful one.

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    Re: Beautiful One

    Mhm.

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    Re: Beautiful One

    this was short and simple, flow was nice..imagey was good enough...could have got more creative, and added a bit more vocab..overall it was a ok drop from me....return the feed if you dont mind...keep leevating and dropping..

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