ladybug

[spokenoh]

lovebug,
dressed in red fashions,
you come to me each Winter,
staying in the warmth
of the room, along a window pane
above the furnace, still
as the picture on the wall,

fluttering about, once in awhile,
and I don't know why.

dotted like eyes,
black spots mistaken for cancer
but they're just freckles

along your nose,
off-brown constellations

love
(bug)

love bug,
my furnace baby
in the rocking chair,

hiding her wings

(love)
bug

I'm painting your portrait
on fingernails, holding you
like a newborn,
in my hand

my palm the station,
fingers extended like runways
and your heart the destination

popping up on the radar

love bug,
you can call me home

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[sic_text]

These fucking lady bug are geting into my crib somehow I had like 15 counted on a lamp after I baged them and clear the house another 15 like 5 hrs later then I got home again wtf

[spokenoh]

yeah, I caught and released about 10 of them today, which is what made me think of this.

[Laureate]

haha I love this. Aren't they called Asian beatles? they drive my cat nuts. Anyway

"my palm the station,
fingers extended like runways
and your heart the destination"
Loved this description and metaphor and wording and fuckin everything about this. This whole thing was beautifully written, I can't remember the last time I sat down and wrote about something around me most people wouldn't think twice about. Simple concept turned into a beautiful piece.


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[abiona]

Second piece in a row from you and I enjoyed this as well. Simple and playfully expressive.

Laureate already quoted my favorite part... but I enjoyed this as well:

I'm painting your portrait
on fingernails, holding you
like a newborn,
in my hand

Made me smile because I can remember actually painting them on my fingernails as well.

I always enjoy pieces like this that turn brief moments into stories because they are organic and 'real'... and I dig the insight into a view of the authors world.

Nice.

[spokenoh]

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