Hip Hop Manual

[Airness]

Second post... Please don't close this topic for no links, I'm a bit confused on the system? Somebody wanna let me know what's good with that?

What happened to the era of true real?
When hip-hop was an expression of how you and your crew feel
For all those kids without a true meal
No inspiration just bullets and blue steel
Caged up in the ghetto like animals
Peeling off the four fifth like bananas do
Feeding off each others blood like cannibals
Like the apollo they clap on a man or two
So you ask what's your man to do?
So I sit and follow the hip-hop manual

Hip-hop knows no hoes
Drives no cars, and rocks no ice
Hip-hop is about staying true to what you love in life
Hip-hop knows no hoes
Drives no cars, and rocks no ice
Hip-hop is everything in the world that's not quite trife

It's been a while since Rakim and Eric B
But today doesn't cut it like the president's cherry tree
Hip hop is deeper than the mainstream
Spreading real messages is a true emcee's main dream
How bad does the pain seem, to those that are not real
That never even shot steel, collecting dust on the shelf like Hot Wheels
So next time ask how the cops feel, when your hammer full
Cause the jail's packed and they'd love to jam her full
So picture the game without wack rap like a camera
Just sit back and relax as we write the hip-hop manual

Hip-hop knows no hoes
Drives no cars, and rocks no ice
Hip-hop is about staying true to what you love in life
Hip-hop knows no hoes
Drives no cars, and rocks no ice
Hip-hop is everything in the world that's not quite trife

The hip-hop manual ain't no skateboard trick
It's enough realness for me to take your chick
And flip her over like a skateboard trick
But on the real though, take it real slow
Cause I'm the real show, ask ya' man he'll know
That I'm takin' the game over easy like free throws
You never pushed kilos, probably never touched p-loads
Deplete my lines on your wack image, I need a reload
So please note, my lines are grand like a g-note
There's a new general in town, it's about time you demote
To lower standards like college chicks, follow this?
No hollow tips, just a balla spliff and a bottle of Chris'
That'll put me on top like a college chick

Bringin' it to you live and annual
Just another edition of the hip-hop manual .....

[Airness]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...7&postcount=12
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...6&postcount=10

Nevermind about that links thing, I got it figured out. ^^^

[Bstill]

i think you need to get a lil more complexed when you write fam other then that your flow was sort of choppy but you had nice imagery with this piece i like the concept ur had kinda fell short of making what the title edged it up to be but other then that you should work on painting a picture when you write you got made skills expressing the story and getting your point across now its time for you to make it have the imagery so a picture gets stuck with the read just work on these lil things and you should evolve to become something serious with dropping OM's

[Airness]

Word man, thanks for the feed. I totally agree with what you say, as I read that over a few times I could most definitely feel a little choppyness in the flow. This wasn't as natural as I had hoped, it was forced a little bit, I was just tryin' to get a post on here...

Thanks for the feed again though, I'll definitely look to fix that up for the next go-around...

[Airness]

Ups.

[The Genesis]

the rhyme scheme was relatively simple, so strictly lyrically speaking it was decent. but I felt the subject and your message came across clear and to the point in this piece, good shit.

[Airness]

Thanks for the feedback man.

[The Genesis]

no doubt, return the favor when you get a chance-
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-385285.html

[Que-C]

i feel the direction but i sense a few styles from other rappers, and its a lil simple, simple can be good but its gotta be a lil more unique, but the delivery and word play were nice, all came together well

[Ace of Aces]

good stuff. i'm not real big on self praise verses or this is hip hop and i'm that verses but you did it well from my point of view. haven't seen one in awhile but you reminded me that it might not be so bad to check out one of these once in awhile. flow was point and you had a couple cool lines in there. keep it up.

[theprojekt]

To lower standards like college chicks, follow this?
No hollow tips, just a balla spliff and a bottle of Chris'
That'll put me on top like a college chick

sick shit bro. i really liked this drop. you're message came across clear. the only i think i wasn't really feeling was the chorus, but another than that well fucking done haha.

[Sting3r]

cool subject matter, not bad mate..