PS: Very Well (0-0) Vs. Phrantik (0-0)

[Mystery~Murdera]

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[Very Well]

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your music is useless...yea you a Rock star stupid
cuz u a dope fiend w/ track marks in ya arms 2 prove it
peep the votes, u'll 'Trail' so far behind u'd need a dirt bike
if making moves is an art then this dude is a 'Still' life
been in a 'slump' for so long its givin him bad posture
when votes are 'cast' the only 1 u gonna gets from a doctor
subliminal hits, u aint runnin' this..u just runnin' bitch
whats in a name?, his got the word 'ran' in the middle of it
....i'll let him prewrite, he cant keystyle for shit
only thing he's keyed was his ex-girls new whip
you lose, its like you stole from a record store g
cuz when im thru its You who's walkin out with the 'L-P.'*
u crybaby, plus u soft as hell..how can i lose?
if i 'poked' fun at him he'd die from multiple stab wounds
try Jazz dude, u good at blowin' on pipes...
cuz yur rap careers 'on the rocks' like liquor w/ ice


*i hate havn to explain but this for the few slow cats, L-P as in a loss for 'P'hrantik/L.P as in a recorded album.

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i'll post when i write something.

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lets kick it off with sex talk, I come hard in lyrics and sex too
so VW, according to your labido Frankie Muniz drives you.
He can turn you on, and rev you up, i mean - he makes you hurry this
but your parked in his garage; cause no one likes fast & the furious

and thats the beginning, my flows off - but i'll prevail
i'm cutting your own strings and making Well kick the pail.
or the bucket, fuck-it: it doesnt matter you're still on my plate
so i'll rip apart the Well like i'm paid to excivate.
then we'll see the shit you flow - and know that its more than-ah
flush kit and rosie o'donnell - im talking Pre-Enema.
tik's on top of this game, miles above Very - it's known he's well-er!
i mean, if you're the Well - i'm barking down you like ol' Yeller!

The top dog, chicks love it, i stick it in em, at the mall an' at school
while you're a pedophile, lovin' it when kids are fallin' in you.
i topped you with punches - so RB - it's time to swallow your doubt
i drowned this kid in flow after a three year drought.

Good battle VW - i rushed this cause my girl was in town long-dist. sucks.
and im outta town tomorrow. props, keep up.

*edit for typo

[Vaskez]

your music is useless...yea you a Rock star stupid
cuz u a dope fiend w/ track marks in ya arms 2 prove it
^^nah
peep the votes, u'll 'Trail' so far behind u'd need a dirt bike
if making moves is an art then this dude is a 'Still' life
^^heh pretty coo
been in a 'slump' for so long its givin him bad posture
when votes are 'cast' the only 1 u gonna gets from a doctor
^^concept was aight, wording sucked ass
subliminal hits, u aint runnin' this..u just runnin' bitch
whats in a name?, his got the word 'ran' in the middle of it
^^no
....i'll let him prewrite, he cant keystyle for shit
only thing he's keyed was his ex-girls new whip
^^meh
you lose, its like you stole from a record store g
cuz when im thru its You who's walkin out with the 'L-P.'*
^^not bad, but lol @ explaining it, this is LLL man, you'd have to be a dumbass not to get that

u crybaby, plus u soft as hell..how can i lose?
if i 'poked' fun at him he'd die from multiple stab wounds
^^meh
try Jazz dude, u good at blowin' on pipes...
cuz yur rap careers 'on the rocks' like liquor w/ ice
^^weak

2 quotable

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lets kick it off with sex talk, I come hard in lyrics and sex too
so VW, according to your labido Frankie Muniz drives you.
^^pretty coo
He can turn you on, and rev you up, i mean - he makes you hurry this
but your parked in his garage; cause no one likes fast & the furious
^^meh

and thats the beginning, my flows off - but i'll prevail
i'm cutting your own strings and making Well kick the pail.
^^good concept, wack wording
or the bucket, fuck-it: it doesnt matter you're still on my plate
so i'll rip apart the Well like i'm paid to excivate.
^^ok, coulda been better
then we'll see the shit you flow - and know that its more than-ah
flush kit and rosie o'donnell - im talking Pre-Enema.
^^eh
tik's on top of this game, miles above Very - it's known he's well-er!
i mean, if you're the Well - i'm barking down you like ol' Yeller!
^^no
The top dog, chicks love it, i stick it in em, at the mall an' at school
while you're a pedophile, lovin' it when kids are fallin' in you.
^^no
i topped you with punches - so RB - it's time to swallow your doubt
i drowned this kid in flow after a three year drought.
^^needed better wording

v/Very Well

[Mystery~Murdera]

tik's on top of this game, miles above Very - it's known he's well-er!
i mean, if you're the Well - i'm barking down you like ol' Yeller!

or the bucket, fuck-it: it doesnt matter you're still on my plate
so i'll rip apart the Well like i'm paid to excivate.

These lines are signs that once you adjust to the times... Phrantik
is going to be a fucking problem. You're definetely on the right path.
Structure is ehh, setups are ehh, but hell you've been gone how long?
I think you'll start the season off fine and end with a definate winning
record.

Very Well
... surprised me... you're good. You have the potential to be very very
good. Stop with all 'this shit' in this league. It's not needed and it's gonna
cost you votes. I guarantee it. Stop explaining stuff line this is front lines.
You won this, though. Probably by a land slide. I'd like to see a rematch
around week 7. If both of you care you'll both be in the 16 man playoffs.

v/ very well

[Mars.]

you lose, its like you stole from a record store g
cuz when im thru its You who's walkin out with the 'L-P.'*
u crybaby, plus u soft as hell..how can i lose?
if i 'poked' fun at him he'd die from multiple stab wounds

vs.

alot of decent lines that need just a little work....


v/Very Well, g.job fellas.

[Baron Mynd]

or the bucket, fuck-it: it doesnt matter you're still on my plate
so i'll rip apart the Well like i'm paid to excivate.

vs

been in a 'slump' for so long its givin him bad posture
when votes are 'cast' the only 1 u gonna gets from a doctor
....i'll let him prewrite, he cant keystyle for shit
only thing he's keyed was his ex-girls new whip
you lose, its like you stole from a record store g
cuz when im thru its You who's walkin out with the 'L-P.'*


some other nice concepts from very well were worded badly enough to exclude them from the quotables list. but dont worry too much. yo should go far.


vote: very well

[SirusX]

your music is useless...yea you a Rock star stupid
cuz u a dope fiend w/ track marks in ya arms 2 prove it
-fake personal... but its nice
peep the votes, u'll 'Trail' so far behind u'd need a dirt bike
if making moves is an art then this dude is a 'Still' life
-not feeling it
been in a 'slump' for so long its givin him bad posture
when votes are 'cast' the only 1 u gonna gets from a doctor
-i liked this
subliminal hits, u aint runnin' this..u just runnin' bitch
whats in a name?, his got the word 'ran' in the middle of it
-the punch is so wack, but the set-up is real nice. lol
....i'll let him prewrite, he cant keystyle for shit
only thing he's keyed was his ex-girls new whip
-yupp.
you lose, its like you stole from a record store g
cuz when im thru its You who's walkin out with the 'L-P.'*
-nope.
u crybaby, plus u soft as hell..how can i lose?
if i 'poked' fun at him he'd die from multiple stab wounds
-i liked this
try Jazz dude, u good at blowin' on pipes...
cuz yur rap careers 'on the rocks' like liquor w/ ice
-again, setup is nice, punch is wack.

Overall you went from wack to nice, and back again. Verse was a ride forsure, but it had more of a solid touch to it than a weak one. nice drop.

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lets kick it off with sex talk, I come hard in lyrics and sex too
so VW, according to your labido Frankie Muniz drives you.
-uhh... ur a dood, talkin about dicks. Im not feelin it.
He can turn you on, and rev you up, i mean - he makes you hurry this
but your parked in his garage; cause no one likes fast & the furious
-so, really this was a 3 bar set up to a soft punch.
and thats the beginning, my flows off - but i'll prevail
i'm cutting your own strings and making Well kick the pail.
-naw
or the bucket, fuck-it: it doesnt matter you're still on my plate
so i'll rip apart the Well like i'm paid to excivate.
-ok
then we'll see the shit you flow - and know that its more than-ah
flush kit and rosie o'donnell - im talking Pre-Enema.
-heh
tik's on top of this game, miles above Very - it's known he's well-er!
i mean, if you're the Well - i'm barking down you like ol' Yeller!
-naw
The top dog, chicks love it, i stick it in em, at the mall an' at school
while you're a pedophile, lovin' it when kids are fallin' in you.
-naw
i topped you with punches - so RB - it's time to swallow your doubt
i drowned this kid in flow after a three year drought.
-soft.


Well got this.

[Mystery~Murdera]

Very well wins