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Thread: first real piece take a look

  1. February 12th, 2004, 06:41 PM #1
    brandonleo
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    first real piece take a look

    yo i'm the cripple in red
    or the blood red crip
    ya, you heard what i said,
    dont make me bust you in the lip:
    this here's the federal ferret
    yo, he walks the walk
    in that he has merit
    but hell never talk.
    man, together well make you balk
    cause we sick like that
    the ferret, he likes to stalk
    man, me, i just rock,
    dont say nothin dissin
    or you i will sock
    man, you just pissin
    ill take you to the dock
    cu, youll sink like a rock
    your body the ferret will fill with weights
    so it dont float back to the top
    man stop that cryin
    heres a mop:
    'snot like your dyin,
    fuck, them tears youd better sop,
    ~F2

    *THIS RAP WAS WRITTEN BY FEDERAL FERRET AND INTENDED TO BE RAPPED BY THE BLOODY RED CRIP.
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  2. February 12th, 2004, 08:41 PM #2
    RapidFire
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    and this was a poem? this isn't worth the criticism...
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  3. February 12th, 2004, 09:46 PM #3
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    umm is all i have to say
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  4. February 12th, 2004, 10:10 PM #4
    Neruda II
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    agrees with ripedfire.
    murder murder
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  5. February 16th, 2004, 10:11 PM #5
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    maybe poems isnt youre thing man
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  6. February 17th, 2004, 02:11 AM #6
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    that was pretty bad dog-- i can see your idea, its just a fucked up one

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  7. February 17th, 2004, 07:07 PM #7
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    well hummm see it...... well hum... didnt make no kinda sense
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  8. February 17th, 2004, 08:16 PM #8
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    all hail rapid fire haha
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  9. February 18th, 2004, 10:34 AM #9
    brandonleo
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    yeah you all i do suck ok i am only 15 so yeah i dont have a high vocabulary
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  10. February 18th, 2004, 07:13 PM #10
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    you dont' need high vocabulary to write a poem...poems usually flow with emotional meaning this was crazy i kinda raised my eyebrow as i read this maybe you'll do better next time...and age has nothing to do with it
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  11. March 10th, 2004, 12:18 AM #11
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    New, so dont know if this'll have an impact, but I agree with rapid fire, and delusion is right. Age dont have anything to do with ya rhyming... good luck next time tho.
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  12. March 13th, 2004, 03:23 PM #12
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    horrible........the blood red crip? made no sense. age makes no difference....im 15 also..go peep my shit..i have high voab...good luck with rhyming let alone homes
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  13. March 13th, 2004, 04:57 PM #13
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    this was not a poem... and at about 10 i had higher vocab than that..
    just horrible... but work at it and youll ge tbetter
    .WP.
    .. It' Still Perfect..
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  14. March 13th, 2004, 05:52 PM #14
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    u think ure bad cuz u 15? im younger than u dawg and i can do betta. lol
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  15. March 13th, 2004, 09:49 PM #15
    prophacyz
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    i'm 15 and i'm fuckin published already....
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