Quote:
fray our need
to exploringly grow and live
indepth a world of impurity.
The alteration (*Yeah it's a word, I guess it'd be classed as an adverb) is intentional, you might be able to spot it upon another read in the context of the clause. I agree it was pretty shit, and I know was a weak move but it made me feel better about the stanza in the sense of how the metaphor was structured. I know it's never healthy to say 'well I understand so fukkawf', but it's kind of to show myself that i'm growing to appreciate the target of the writing (objectively at least) and I really didn't expect it to be picked up, so congrats lol.