FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6 - Marion wins.
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@MARION MOTLEY
@WOLV LEDR6
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
Qh4#
Going 6
Peace to all the Triple agents in the Matrix. Lmfao
This won’s in your honor.
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Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
Quote:
Originally Posted by
Kill Spree
Gonna extend.
I might post today but I’m watching the game
And will prolly be too distracted. So extend to be safe.
Thanks for the opportunity!
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
That’s cool. My shit’s basically done, so I’ll just PM it to Spree sometime today.
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
Yup verses due tonight. I’ll clean thread up at some point
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
Walked in the FL office first day on the job super spiffy hella proud,
Blowing a blunt so loud, Dave was like “in’that petrol I smell’n da house?”
Smh …bruh it’s like literally the first round! You’ve got to be kidding me-giving me this sore clown,
Just look at the poor sap! WOLV bout to shit on the Brown like bigotry in the discord chat!
Watch ’em stumble to the snap, just to fumble through his rap in a horrible performance.
He’ likes floral bowls from Florence, and pulling a no-shows on opponents!
He’d rather shop for decor, and loves to run in slow-mo
Look no matter how you paint it— It’s curtains for this homo!
Text Royalty? Puleease …silly-hillbilly-this’ well written-inbred-crimson-coated- crooked-teether,
Last time a Patriot shit on the throne on screen this bad, Mel Gibson was in Theaters.
His bitch? Man I swear the Lord dissed her, hands like an orc’s sister! Toes?
Harrier than if Frodo was Wookiee! U know—body’s hella busted, but her face kinda meh—calls her his “Harfoot Pussy!”
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
MM verse
This fed-issue Wesson on an alpha wolf finds beta tendencies
Since you said some Matrix shit to me, I grab the Agent Smith and squeeze
Dual pipes made a mess, bet the cops are gettin squeamish
When I raise the twins on Wolf, it ain’t Romulus & Remus
Yeah he went to prison, it was quite sad and gross when
The opps put wood in Wolvy’s guts, no climax from Logan
Get a Halo when I aim and make a plasma throw that sticks
You ain’t no Ledr, that’s a Reach if you actin Noble 6
Bring a Louisville Slugger just to swing at you bastards
Drop in on Wolfpac with a bat like I’m Sting in the rafters
Spear him in the kidneys til he’s pissin the proof away
If Wolv a Renal Condition, it’s not Michigan 2-a-days!
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6 - Open For Votes
Marion
This fed-issue Wesson on an alpha wolf finds beta tendencies
Since you said some Matrix shit to me, I grab the Agent Smith and squeeze
Squeezing an Agent Smith doesnt do anything lyrically. sexually maybe. 0/5 concept was there execution was not.
Dual pipes made a mess, bet the cops are gettin squeamish
When I raise the twins on Wolf, it ain’t Romulus & Remus
this was ok. execution was flat tho. 3/5
Yeah he went to prison, it was quite sad and gross when
The opps put wood in Wolvy’s guts, no climax from Logan
I wasnt feeling this punch. you seem to be gravitating to this typing of ending to your bars. with no/not/aint
gross when/logan rhyme felt off to me. 1.5/5
Get a Halo when I aim and make a plasma throw that sticks
You ain’t no Ledr, that’s a Reach if you actin Noble 6
ok here you have established a relation between and Noble 6/halo you started off attacking but then went to a statement that didnt have any aggression to it. 0/5
Bring a Louisville Slugger just to swing at you bastards
Drop in on Wolfpac with a bat like I’m Sting in the rafters
3/5 old school wrestling bars. this was okay
Spear him in the kidneys til he’s pissin the proof away
If Wolv a Renal Condition, it’s not Michigan 2-a-days!
as is imma have to go for 1/2 for the closer. im not sure what a kidnet condition has to do with michigan 2 a days. im willing to hear you on on this one but as is 1/5
8.5/10
vs
Wolv
Walked in the FL office first day on the job super spiffy hella proud,
Blowing a blunt so loud, Dave was like “in’that petrol I smell’n da house?”
as much as i love me some loud this needed to attack your opponent. 0/5
Smh …bruh it’s like literally the first round! You’ve got to be kidding me-giving me this sore clown,
Just look at the poor sap! WOLV bout to shit on the Brown like bigotry in the discord chat!
shit on brown?naw thats not it. you did a lot of internal rhyming to make these 2 bars into one. imo shorten the bar. stick to one rhyme scheme. tighten up the punch. 1/5
Watch ’em stumble to the snap, just to fumble through his rap in a horrible performance.
He’ likes floral bowls from Florence, and pulling a no-shows on opponents!
performance/florance is good but opponents. the last sylables match with opponets but its weak rhyme.however floral bowls are pretty gay. its very gay that you know that. but it doesnt go with pulling now shows. but you did attack your opponent this time. 1.5/5
He’d rather shop for decor, and loves to run in slow-mo
Look no matter how you paint it— It’s curtains for this homo!
a lot of interior design themed bars. sus. but you attacked again.2/5
Text Royalty? Puleease …silly-hillbilly-this’ well written-inbred-crimson-coated- crooked-teether,
Last time a Patriot shit on the throne on screen this bad, Mel Gibson was in Theaters.
this was pretty funny 3/5
His bitch? Man I swear the Lord dissed her, hands like an orc’s sister! Toes?
Harrier than if Frodo was Wookiee! U know—body’s hella busted, but her face kinda meh—calls her his “Harfoot Pussy!”
this bar is random and kind of funny BUT it didnt go anywhere. this actually might be really funny if it was audio but as is the punch is lacking and it is way to wordy. 1.5/5
9/20
this was an unexpectedly close battle. and tbh Marion you could have won this but i feel like too many of your bars were bland statements. 2 lines in fact. that is what imo kept you from what could have been a dominating victory.
GG gents
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6 - Open For Votes
WOLV - Not sure who Dave is, referenced in 1st bar. I've also never used discord to understand the second bar.
Set up for the third bar seemed like your writing was finding a rhythm with the internal multis, shame you stopped and switched to "horrible performance" it slowed the momentum right down. The punch was more of an observation than anything. What accent do you have to be able to multi opponents with performance btw?
The curtains bar probs your best so far, loves to run in slo-mo could've been changed for something more on theme but the rest was ok.
Assumed the patriot bar was a reference to MM's avatar & it worked ok.
Hands like an orc's sister was brilliant, comedic positioning was great. Thought the hairy feet bar was building to a comatose/comb her toes punch. The harfoot pussy closer wasn't the one for me.
Your writing style has flashes of being on point but gets hazy in between. I think it's a case of you've tried to do too much to make it colourful, a bit like driving through a muddy field when you could have laid concrete. Hands like an Orcs sister still fire though.
Marion - Could've left the Agent out and just squeezed the Smith, otherwise this was ok, rhymed nicely
Mythology is not in my knowledge bank so I missed this one.
I see the idea with the Logan bar, a bit gay which adds a humourous element to it. I've never been a fan of the "no... simile" style punches but still ok.
Halo bar was a decent idea
Missed the last 2 references - from the UK so it's not uncommon for me to not catch certain references.
You pieced everything together a bit cleaner than WOLV. I've seen you drop better than this before so I don't think this is your best but there were a couple lines I rated.
Caught around the same from both but found MM was more focused and less of an obstacle course than WOLV.
Vote Marion Motley
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6
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Originally Posted by
WOLV LEDR6
Walked in the FL office first day on the job super spiffy hella proud,
Blowing a blunt so loud, Dave was like “in’that petrol I smell’n da house?”
This wasnt good
Smh …bruh it’s like literally the first round! You’ve got to be kidding me-giving me this sore clown,
Just look at the poor sap! WOLV bout to shit on the Brown like bigotry in the discord chat!
Maybe Im missing a personal? But this whiffed
Watch ’em stumble to the snap, just to fumble through his rap in a horrible performance.
He’ likes floral bowls from Florence, and pulling a no-shows on opponents!
Not feeling it
He’d rather shop for decor, and loves to run in slow-mo
Look no matter how you paint it— It’s curtains for this homo!
This was lackluster
Text Royalty? Puleease …silly-hillbilly-this’ well written-inbred-crimson-coated- crooked-teether,
Last time a Patriot shit on the throne on screen this bad, Mel Gibson was in Theaters.
Great movie..not so great bar
His bitch? Man I swear the Lord dissed her, hands like an orc’s sister! Toes?
Harrier than if Frodo was Wookiee! U know—body’s hella busted, but her face kinda meh—calls her his “Harfoot Pussy!”
This was bad..
Quote:
Originally Posted by
Kill Spree
MM verse
This fed-issue Wesson on an alpha wolf finds beta tendencies
Since you said some Matrix shit to me, I grab the Agent Smith and squeeze
Light jab
Dual pipes made a mess, bet the cops are gettin squeamish
When I raise the twins on Wolf, it ain’t Romulus & Remus
Fire
Yeah he went to prison, it was quite sad and gross when
The opps put wood in Wolvy’s guts, no climax from Logan
Not feeling this
Get a Halo when I aim and make a plasma throw that sticks
You ain’t no Ledr, that’s a Reach if you actin Noble 6
Solid
Bring a Louisville Slugger just to swing at you bastards
Drop in on Wolfpac with a bat like I’m Sting in the rafters
Fuego
Spear him in the kidneys til he’s pissin the proof away
If Wolv a Renal Condition, it’s not Michigan 2-a-days!
Solid.
Prettyone sided. Vote motley
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6 - Open For Votes
Re: FLL WK1:Marion Motley Vs Wolv Ledr6 - Open For Votes
Vote- motley
Better hits and attempts
Wolv had nothing that really stood out to me.. to wordy and flow came off choppy reading it