lol PRIME u aint gotta up, up, up all tha time...rules say one UP a day...now imma give u some feed...
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Ay, I'm from Wortown thats the city where I be
The number of gangs here made the fuckin cops flee
Cause we a drug town and we got them trees
We got blood on our shirts and blood on our sleeves
i liked this opening...rele talkin bout where ur from n what its like...good wroding n flow...2nd bar was good talkin bout drugs n slangin...but ur 3rd line fucked up tha imagery just a bit...u shuda said WE GOT BLOOD ON OUR CARS n BLOOD ON OUR SLEEVES...u dont have to say cars but it'll add a lil more imagery if u rele show us where else tha blood is...
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But please, don't try to act like yall are hard
We'll smack you around all day till your a fuckin retard
I'm from the valley, the great old block in the sun
We go around shootin up white boys for fun
Cut a cop in two so he gets to see Pun (Big Pun)
Deal to your fuckin son, cause we know you miss him a ton
first bar was pretty good...some funny shit but probly cud have been worded a lil nicer...2nd bar offered a lil imagery but i was hoping for more...rele give us a mental picture of tha block...funny ine bout US white boys...3rd bar was good liked tha cop line but ur last line cuda been even more good if u said...SEND MONEY TO UR SON...makes it seem like ur holdin him hostage...or that ur stealing tha money n letters she sends to him...wording is everything...
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But hey thats the game, thats the way it'll be
We gang bang all day and go to sleep at three
So, I'm tellin this to all yall niggas tryin to be tough
You head over here man, shits gonna be rough
We aint that hospitable and we dont except bluffs
And no nigga on my block gets taken away in cuffs
lol funny first bar bout how we operate...slang all day n bang all night...2nd bar was good talked bout fakers in tha hood...real shit...but u cuda worded it better...3rd bar started good...but WE DONT EXCEPT BLUFFS...that was kinda dumb...i mean u shud reword that...n ur last line didnt make sense...no one gets taken away in cuffs?...ok a few ways to look at this...either the get killed by cops...u kill em before they snitch...or IDK what other way wud explain that...if u get time tell me what u meant plz...
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From the boonies to the city, Wortowns for me
It's the place where I'm from and the place that I be
I got my homies to my left and my homies to my right
We aint picken fights man, we lookin through gun sights
first bar was tight lettin em know once again where ur from n explains ur concept n ur title...ur second line was pointless...sry PONIT BLANK PERIOD...last bar as a great ending...diggin tha hoodness n ur wording was great...rele came out strong...liked how u repped ur city...shit wud be fire on audio...just get a beat n get too it...GOOD n FUN READ...KEEP ON WRITING THAT HOOD SHIT n STAY UP ON UR CRAFT BRUH!!!
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