...Time Stops...

Time Stop's

(The Worlds Rotation And Time Stops, And It Goes Dark, Except For Me And Only For Me To Be Heard)


The Grains Of Sand Observe The Pains Of Man With Indifference
While Free Falling, Re Calling Shameless Plans Of Increments
An Instant Is Defined By A Second That’s Combined With A Lesson
Life Is A Sum Of The Seconds, But Some Live A Life Time A Second
Time Is Perspective, A Seductive Ocean, Conductive Lotion
Tasteless, Invites You To Waste It, But Some Obstruct The Motion
An Instructive Potion Of Enlightenment, That’s Heightened When
Innocence Nixes Ignorance Inside Divine And Righteous Men
A Dollar Sign Is Time That’s Spent In Hopes Of Securin’ Tomorrow
Hope Is Blurrin’ The Sorrow That Life Is A Tour And Its Borrowed
From He With No Start To Finish Who Sees No Heart Or Vision
The Grandfather Stands Taller And Sleeps In Those Darker Prisms
Why Honor Wisdom? Well It Passes The Tears Of Time
The Past Effects The Mind, Through Déjà Vu, Its Passed A Second Time
I Have To Press Rewind, Far Away Enough The Track Makes A U Turn
But Few Learn From The Relationship The Past Drapes The Future

My Time Interval Slots Are Often Spent In Spiritual Block
So I Pass The Time By Starring At The Hands On A Grand-Father Clock
Flooded With Cynical Thoughts, I Release The First Notion
And Freeze The Time By Suspending The Earth’s Motion
A Surge Potent Enough To Tear The Surfaces Texture In A Sense
Like Weight Is Measured In Pounds, Time Is Measured In Events
Text Words Can’t Impress, So I’ll Help You Invision This Certainty
An Old Timer Has A Short Life, While A Teen Live An Eternity
Every Ticks An Emergency, With Out It, You’re In An Ocean Of Mess
Cause Times The Hitchhiker That Leads You On The Roads Of Success
It Opens The Next Chapters And Captures The Bland Design
That We Can Live Long And Leave Our Footprints On The Sands Of Time
Things That Can Distract The Mind And Lead It Away From The Truth In Lesson
Might Lose Affection For Patience, Yet Perseverance Is A Useful Weapon
Draw It, It’ll Boost Progression And It Will Erase The Proceedings
It’s Time To Throw Away My Clocks And Put Faith Back Into My Feelings.

(Earth’s Rotation Resumes And Time Comes Back To Play Its Role As Life….For I Was Heard And Need To Say No More….)

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wow I really enjoyed this but iss a little depressing lol. Good imagery, great rhyming, flow wuz perfect. Some of tha lines seemed a little forced in spots, but overall this wuz a good showing. Some lines really stuck out in my mind like:

An Instant Is Defined By A Second That’s Combined With A Lesson
Life Is A Sum Of The Seconds, But Some Live A Life Time A Second

But yeah good job on this one, it's not an overly done topic either so it wuz a refreshing read

Man. I read two open mics this morning.. one was from the first person to reply to you.. and hers was fire. Now this one, and this is rediculous. I really enjoyed it. This was well written & easy to read. You had some nice metaphors & symbolizm in there. It flowed really well. Well done.

Ok Thanx For The Feed. :)

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good peice. topic was interesting.
nice flow. good rhymes!. nice multies.
vocab was nice throughout.
imagery was good and overall this was good.
keep it up

Ok Thanx For The Feed..

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