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Rest In Peace
Oh mother i miss you, rest in peace
Oh father i miss you too, rest in peace
Oh brother i miss as well, rest in peace
All my family died for me, rest in peace (rest in peace x2 (echo))
If it wasnt for my family i wouldnt be standin here now
I cant remmber how they died, but i'm still sayin wow
It was a depressin life for me after the day they past away
Now i cant go to sleep, so please god take me today
it's just not workin out, life isnt like it used to be...
so i look up to the sky and say please god take me....
I cant live life with sorrow and angyness in my soul
everytime i think of them my heart turns cold.........
Rest in peace family you were always there for me...
and knowing your spirits are still here for me..........
My mind is a swirling disaster,suicid in mind..........
I cant live this life of thinkin of you all the time
i cant sleep, work, eat, cant even whatch TV
so i decided to let the pain out by singin this by me
Its called rest in peace dedicated toward you, family
cuz that day when all of you died was a tragety....
Oh mother i miss you, rest in peace
Oh father i miss you too, rest in peace
Oh brother i miss as well, rest in peace
All my family died for me, rest in peace (rest in peace x2 (echo))
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Ok,here it goes.I think what you should elevate right now is a more unqiue and complex or different storyline.The way you use your storyline witht the rhyme scheme is good,but i think with a mmulties and the adfivcxe i agve you above would make it better.I see that you have the potential for it so i know you'll do better.
Please check: Different Direction.
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ok..thks for tha feed....uppin 4 more
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ok...thanks for the feed..uppin for more............
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srry for the double post my computer is fucked
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I liked the topic, is this going to be in audio? It seems ot me like you already have a beat in mind. I would've liked to have seem stronger rhymes and vocab in this. But you still held my interest until the end of the piece. Matter of fact, PM me if you make this an audio because i'd like to hear it. I caught the emotion in this piece. Just aim to put multi's and more in-depth imagery in your next piece.
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