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*The Forgotten Journey*
Rabid sandstorms were brewed in deserts as their skies obtained an Arabian Curse
The firm carrier's Cranium Burst when I originated upside-down through an Alien Birth
Evolved magical tentacles that burned intergallactical chemicals at the Speed Of Light
Presented the clinical poise to Breed The Nights and fight the knights with a Need To Write
Alive With Health, I formulated Nebulas flame and compelled the adversary to Arrive 'n Melt
He escaped with Surprisin Welts as I realized my corruption 'n blazed through Orions Belt
Traveled and rambled the blue planet as the soil Weeped Mud that caused a Deep Flood
On an expedition I explored egyptian corridors 'n marked the doors with a Sheeps Blood
Dug graves to floss fossils of deceased pharaohs with secrets that would Shock The Past
Sped away with a Rocket Blast, using wings as I sliced the darkness with a Flock Of Bats
Hissing with torched breath and sword teeth, we forcefully Swarmed Into A Campfire
Fusion of my skin layers distorted the mortal's course so I Morphed Into A Vampire
With my hungry fangs, I led an assembly of furious Stallions On A Spectacular March
Victorious against mammoths cuz I was equipped with a Medallion Of A Draculas Heart
Declared an end to all pawns when my Rook Was Cloned with the flag of Crooked Bones
Overpowered the reigning kings royalty and caused earthquakes when I Took The Throne
My presence opened the gates that unleashed the wrath that Fractured The Last World
I sailed the lavas of hell and made Satan walk the plank as I Captured The Black Pearl
Sewed and stitched the furs of a caveman and didnt stop til I had Woven Three Quilts
I fled free through the red sea to Greece 'n Roamed On Three Stilts til Rome Was Re-built
Floated in the oceans with the opponents that emerged and impelled me to Swim Deeper
Now Im being acquainted with my demise by shaking hands with the Grim Reaper...
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Damn son this shit was hot, looks like ive got some competition when it comes to flow and imagery this piece had it all very impressive. The concept was very original and strange so obviously i was really feeling it. Your vocab was perfect but it seemed effortless the way you wrote the piece and you never once overused your vocab which is always a plus point. Your imagery matched extremely well with your vocab very descriptive and dark you set the scene and drew me into the piece after the opening couplet. I would quote lines but i dont say this too often there were way too many to write.
Not only was the vocab and imagery tight your flow was also on point a lot of multies so it was just a very complex piece and i loved reading it and im a cocky bastard so i say that rare. Your a very talented writer i'll be looking forward to your next Om welcome to the site nice to see some new dope writers on Om.
Can you return the feed on my new OM id appreciate it:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?=245014
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Thanx for the nice breakdown. I'll return the feed no doubt.
BUMP
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Not only was the vocab and imagery tight your flow was also on point a lot of multies so it was just a very complex piece and i loved reading it and im a cocky bastard so i say that rare. Your a very talented writer i'll be looking forward to your next Om welcome to the site nice to see some new dope writers on Om.
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it was good real good
the fool was sick
the vocab was good
the structure was good in the right places
i give it a 9/10
::hand claps::
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