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I Only Need Myself.
I'm steadily losing religion while also confusing this wisdom
I realize my views and opinions are only amusing his minions
Refusing to listen, the other day someone threw me a vision
It showed a gruesome incision to the state of blues that I live in
Making a clueless decision, who's really choosing admission?
And the few who do get in.. are they bruised from deliverance?
There's no room for indifference, is God holding a spot for me?
He's probably hoping for honesty and I'm promoting hypocrisy
At times my lonely conscience leaks a load of thoughts that bother me
I'm told that I'm a mockery, there's no one around to talk to me
I only wanna stop to think, so caught up that I forgot to breathe
I'll try to go on flawlessly but I'm so exhausted and on the brink
Mentally washed-up and often weak, I have my eyes on a feast
My plate is full of lies and deceit.... so don't be surprised if I eat
Inside I'm a beast, feeling trapped, it's like I try to get free
And any denial will bring.. overflowing anger that rises like yeast
This provides me at least... with a sudden newfound revival
Then a moment of hype will, remind me I'm alive still.....
..and so I put down the bible.
I only need myself.
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Damn.......This is some dope shit man. Flowed well, nice structure, multi's were tight, wording and vocab to be honest was outstanding, concepts and creativity worked very well. I reckon this verse is Hall OF Fame worthy, that's why I'm nominating it. Keep dropping shit like this. pz.
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agreed with knox this was a really dope drop by you nice concept and amazing flow each lines went down perfectly liked the emotional level you brought in this piece also the vocab you used made it even doper to read your turning into a very dope topical wtiter also you should join ss stay up man and can you please retun the favor thanxs
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good stuff i really liked this. i thought the end was a little sudden but very nice drop. good flow nice multi's and overall a good read. i like the theme of this also. very cool idea. and yes listen to tim and join ss. i wanna beat you....lol.
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This was tight a good concept you got good imagery and emotion out in the rhymes it was just raw.
The structure and vocab were fine youve got a nice flow so overall nothing to hate on a really nice verse.
Return the favour.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=178619
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Ouch.. that was deep on some Fuck God I'mma do me shit lol.. Pretty bold of you.
But aside from that this joint was tight.. I was lovin' the multis, one of my favorite devices to use & read.. Done very well here.
Overall nice Peice of work here Geno.. Keep it Bangin' as Usual ;)
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:thumbup: dat shit was hot kid i mean dat shit really work on a nigga mind make a nigga think bout what i done been thru wit all dis otha shit dats some real dope spittin keep spittin dat shit you gone be a RB legend holla at da kid young duce
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This was a very nice piece. It really did prove that it is quality not quantity. You wrote consistantly, maintaining a good flow and level of vocabulary. It was not the technical aspects, however, that attracted my attention. Your emotional writing, complimented by the vocabulary made this truly a great piece. It wasn't just a story that relates to you but it brings other people in to, it involves the reader. This is something that's hard to do and so I really see the quality and work that's in this.
Nice piece... If you could check out "Unseen Insurgent" in my sig I'd appreciate it.
Peace
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thanks.. feedback returned to Tim, warchild, and Deviate.
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