Taste of victory.

futers heading left we're still trying to get our past right.
the slow darkness will eventually cover our fast light.
we need to start clean because I keep having dark dreams.
we can either make one movie together or part scenes.
this is bad but we still haven't reach our worse yet.
so we'll keep exchanging words like #'s when we first met.
I'll be damn if somebody tells me what I feel is wrong.
because its like steriod love........ what I feel is strong.


Im trying to fix my reality.... I keep having broke dreams.
sick cuz the love .....I need it physically like dope feans.
the truth hurts but that doesn't mean we're paired liars.
and if we are then we're not getting very far like aired tires.
the way we are living is bad, thats why my vision is bad.
arguments are like hard falls I guess our collision is sad.
this bickering and hate we have I wish we can stop that.
because if you've wasted my time I want my clock back.
I've had it with this shit, thought it was magic in this chick.
but I see it wasn't now your just a fling added on my list.

the good times were pleasent we had a little scuffle.
and the bad times well there over like us being a couple.
the dumb weeks were just added to our smart days.
along with my pride my heart stays but we must part ways.
I tried ...sorry it wasn't enough effort to make this last.
but for only one more last time I'll let our lips crash.
visiously....just so I can get one last taste of victory.

this was ok i liked the flow and imagery but it couldve been a whole lot better but it was still good and so was the emotion and your wordplay was dope in this one but overall i liked it because of the flow emotion and imagery even tho i think it couldve been better than it was but its still okay stay up and keep writin

emotions were felt homeboy....know just how ya feel...you began very strong with this piece, with a good choice of words but then the quality of the drop kinda declined....the flow was a bit choppy here and there with a lotta switches...overall a rather simple piece....structure was ok....I'll give u a 6/10
anyway stay up and rtf