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Moonlight Sonata
Delightful.
The touch of light
that scales her
porcelain skin.
Eclipsed
just beneath
her dollish chin.
Stars
spangled within
the diameter
of her eyes.
The moon.
The light.
Collecting
what's left
of her draining
life.
Hello.
I love you.
Goodbye.
A swan song
if you may
take this knife
into your abdomen.
Trade me
conveyed breaths
in understanding
compliance.
An alliance.
Sated by
silence.
London
drinks your blood
without defiance.
Now.
Close
your eyelids
my sweet
Elizabeth.
An angel
welcomed
by God.
Sent
by a Jack
of all trades
and hearts.
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Re: Moonlight Sonata
very pretty verse of a queen..
i loved it very poetic
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Re: Moonlight Sonata
Beautiful messages through the whole thing
deep meanings
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Re: Moonlight Sonata
An intricate piece to say the least. You possessed proper tone through out the piece putting a emotional significance on the raw emotion you dabbled to convey with the description of both the turning of the story and the character within and the excerpt at hand. Simple yet deadly and affective. The star spangled dialect was subtle to effectiveness. It spoke volumes get stayed within the margin of the imagery wanted to be painted. The little rhyme bit too was sporadic and yet oddly satisfying.
Good job
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Re: Moonlight Sonata
I loved how this was written. It keeps drawing you in emotionally and I thought the rhyme scheme was super dope.
“ the diameter
of her eyes.
The moon.
The light.
Collecting
what's left
of her draining
life.”
This part I thought was particularly hard hitting and beautiful.
The whole thing was smooth, emotionally charged, and concise though. This is dope writing.